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Would if I told you, You'd never see me again Would if I told you, My life was about to end Would if I told you, My final plea goodbye There would be no more interruptions, no more discussions And no more lies Would if I told you, There's no way to live without you Would if I told you, I never meant to overcrowd you Would if I could hold you and make your troubles go away Would if we could make love, Each and everyday Would if I could sing you a beautiful love song Would if we could just talk, And not argue who's right or wrong Would if I wrote you, A passionate love letter Would if I could snap my fingers, And make everything go better Would if I was able, To massage your inner thoughts Would you stop pretending you were perfect and had no faults Would if I forgot , About you completely Would if I forgave, All the ways you deceived me Would if I made the effort , To change my attitude Would if I told you, Your whole attire needs to improve Would if we made a pact, To forget about the past Can you tell me how long you honestly think that will last Would if we tried hard , To make things work Could we let go of the pain, All the suffering and the hurt Would if I just walked out of your life Would you ever acknowledge you even had a wife Would if I decided, To take that drink with you Take a sip right out the bottle, But what will it prove Would if we started all over again Would you be willing to try, For the sake of our kid What would be the cost of a new beginning Would all the pain be lost, Along with good memories Is it really worth the price, Trying to find each other To discover what we lost, Should have never be uncovered Maybe it's time to wash away our tears And remember all the golden moments You and I shared.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 3/6/2009 12:34:00 PM
At first I thought that this was too long. But having read it again I don't think that to be the case. It is a wonderful declamatory piece of poetry and though it sometimes seems self-pitious the overall tenor of the poem covers that well. And what you have written is a very powerful piece of writing. My quibble is with the last stanza: it undermines the rest of the poem and thus lessens the impact of the piece. A lot of work went into this and I feel that it well without that last stanza.
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Date: 3/5/2009 1:29:00 PM
simply incredible. beautiful piece. it has the tone of a great maxwell song
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Date: 3/5/2009 5:30:00 AM
A beautiful answer to your questions in the very last verse. You are a wise woman, and in the end 'wise' will pay off big time. Hang in there. Love, Shar
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Date: 3/5/2009 4:01:00 AM
This is a moving piece of work my friend.. the voice in the piece really let it all hang out.. love the emotions and the openess of the write..wonderful ending.
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Date: 3/5/2009 3:44:00 AM
Forgedaboudit and get a puppy, just kidding Ty. Your poem screams of compromise and the person its about would be bending over backwards to accomodate. Golden memories though are priceless~~Nice writing kiddo
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