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Touch Me - Dusk

Dusk, dressed in mauve feathers, bared pink shoulders, with come-hither snare, touches the foolish Sun with a spectrum of red lips… Up so many stairs they will trod, shutting the world alone in the dark.. New lovers who stroll through gardens of night And as nightingale and the crickets cry Spurned world sets her brain adrift to weep putting out the lights of her eyes shuttered in forsaken bed … Crescent moon stands vigil Until capricious Sun, with fickled breath,… breezes in with Dawn For Nette's "Touch Me" contest (Dusk) by Carrie Richards

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Date: 5/1/2011 8:15:00 AM
Many congratulations on your win in Nette's fine contest Carrie. Have a lovely Sunday....:)
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Date: 4/29/2011 12:06:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie on your win in Nette's contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/28/2011 6:26:00 PM
I would have placed this much higher..I love some of your phases..you never disappoint. BG
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Date: 4/28/2011 5:49:00 PM
Now you see here whatcha did all that "metaphoric touchin!" I love love love the write but I had to weed out all but the most DIRECT refferances to touch, she wasn't going to go for emotional or spiritual touch [dern] NO MATTER it still is an A #1 write Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 4/28/2011 11:36:00 AM
Wonderful write from Dusk to Dawn.Congrats Carrie on your win---kash
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Date: 4/28/2011 11:33:00 AM
Beautiful imagery, nicely done...Congrats Carrie on your win in this contest. luv gautami
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Date: 4/28/2011 9:58:00 AM
So happy to see your poem in the winners' circle, Carrie. I think it's one of the best entries. Congratulations on your win in Nette's contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 4/28/2011 9:55:00 AM
mauve feathers, pink shoulders, love it, congrats on your win in the contest Carrie
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Date: 4/28/2011 7:46:00 AM
Many congrats, Carrie : )
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Date: 4/28/2011 6:10:00 AM
Sun, with fickled breath breezes wow. Many warm congrats
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Date: 4/28/2011 4:56:00 AM
Congrats Carrie on your great win in Nette's contest with this lovely delight and exquisite entry luv.. wonderful words and imagery... enjoy another top ten win with luv..
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Date: 4/28/2011 3:20:00 AM
Oh I honestly loved how you did yours and how Sun takes on with that personality! Really enjoyed this, so hmm it's either Dusk or Dawn for him huh, very unique take on the challenge-- I could just picture Dusk with those mauve feathers-- this was so much fun! Congrats on your win :) & hugs to you & thanks so much for your comments in mine, made me smile so much :D
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Date: 4/27/2011 7:00:00 PM
Looks like you had a lot better idea about what she wanted to write about than me Carrie.Lol.Congratulation on your success in the winner's circle. Agape, Moses
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Date: 4/24/2011 6:35:00 AM
Excellent write Carrie.I think you have to write your name on the page---kashinath
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Date: 4/21/2011 10:21:00 PM
Brilliant, Carrie! Love the images and the way "dusk" touches your heart. Sending you winning wishes for Nette's contest! Love, Carolyn (I'm still out of town fishing, but taking a break. Sunburn!) Love and blessings for a happy Easter, Carolyn
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Date: 4/21/2011 9:23:00 AM
Sensatiional and exceptional! I also wrote of dusk, best of luck in the contest, and thanks for your ever lovely comments on my poetry~~
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Date: 4/21/2011 7:06:00 AM
I feel like I am back in time Carrie, watching on stage, the artist panting words to aw the audiance ! A fine write here dear poet ! I look forward to much more of your poetic thoughts ! ....much love, james
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Date: 4/21/2011 5:16:00 AM
Great metamorphosis, Carrie - enjoyed every line. Love, daver
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Date: 4/20/2011 11:56:00 PM
wonderful just wonderful. I adore personification and if I were judging, this would be high up there! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 4/20/2011 8:20:00 PM
No question that this will be a winner. Just great. BG
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Date: 4/20/2011 5:47:00 PM
Hey now this is an interesting and unique take on Dusk and poetic as well. A personification of Dusk( a favoite time of mine) enveloped in a double Etheree. Now that is cool miss Carrie! Well done and good luck in the contest! Thanks for your comment
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Date: 4/20/2011 5:42:00 PM
Wonderful write for the contest, Carrie
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