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At crushing depths Titanic rests Rusticles- like red ice hang from her corpse [the excrement of fathoms deep bacteria] And now technology [ undreamed of when it was needed] peers at her [long submerged wreckage] from slick sub-like vessels taking computer generated photo mosaics [for investigators to pore over.] Once, mystifying questions are un-layered one by one from evidence locked within her tortured skeleton, revealing [ not the simple impact of an iceberg] sealed her fate] but rather, a 'series of happenings', [without remedy.] Rivets with 'too much slag' gave way letting in Atlantic's weight Her belly full, she hugged her center keel [in futile efforts] to keep bow and stern connected. As she sank, into eternity, chambered cells, [once meant to prevent the onslaught of the sea,] were swiftly breached Sea weight tore her great- ship's-soul asunder, and sinking to the sea's dark floor, she took with her, poor forsaken passengers [crying in disbelief ] at the cruel and lying 'myth.' See sawing down, the broken stern end speared, into fathoms deep mud, the bow rails stayed intact [for all the ghosts to lean on ] And with the solving of her final hours, it is unthinkable, that this rusticled specter [once so full of mystery] had been declared to be 'unsinkable.' ALL YOURS (Jun 10) Contest Judged: 6/9/2021 11:40:00 PM Sponsored by: Brian Strand First Place

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Date: 6/10/2021 12:51:00 AM
A hint of human self-complacency too? Congratulations!
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Date: 8/8/2014 12:16:00 PM
Rusticles--- I love that! It's so perfect and evokes the image of the the decaying ship so perfectly.
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Date: 8/5/2013 5:57:00 AM
A stunning piece which really deserved its super win! CONGRATULATIONS my dear friend and sista Suz! And since somebody sent me a message, i'm passing it to you, Happy Friendship Day! Big sweet hugs! love lots, Leonora
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Date: 8/5/2013 2:42:00 AM
I was sucked in from the very first line...'As she sank, into eternity'...WOW...What I find most sad about the Titanic is all those lives were lost because of foolish arrogance...Congrats my friend - Tim
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Date: 8/4/2013 10:05:00 PM
Suz, Congratulations, with your winning poem..... goodnight~ Linda
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Date: 8/4/2013 5:17:00 PM
Technology in its own infancy, ignorance, wealth, power, haste, and that massive iceberg. All contributing factors to the demise of the RMS Titanic. A sad day in history. Well-written!...Milt
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Date: 8/4/2013 5:06:00 PM
An awesome win SUz..... SKAT
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Date: 8/4/2013 12:48:00 PM
A billionaire is going to build an exact replica of this unsinkable ship .....well penned Suz.....congrats on your win
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Date: 8/2/2013 7:48:00 AM
wow, I LOVE this one!!! YOu are at top form with this free verse of yours,my friend. There is a small book for level three students at my school about these crazy "Happenings" that brought down this great ship and I was reminded of that reader as I read this. GREAT job with this descriptive writing.
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 8/4/2013 12:09:00 PM
Thanks Andrea: I saw a documentary that triggered this poem. There is a story in our family that my Grandmother missed her train that was to connect her to sail on the Titanic. I may not have been born had she caught it. Strange how Fate works.

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