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THESE BROKEN DREAMS Collaboration with White Wolf If these broken dreams were meant to be, Then why is this world so hard to see? This world we live in is so obscene, If only we could live in a dream. Some say living in a dream is bad I always think that awfully sad For it's this world that's broken, not the dream We stand on it's painful smithereens What is important is in your heart Not all in life wants you to be smart, Find your pack, find your path, find your rhyme That's what is important in your time When wondering if life is worthwhile, You’ll often find yourself with a smile (nine syllables per line)

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Date: 1/26/2017 4:35:00 PM
Wonderful sonnet with great depth and meaning. Well done, Darren. A great collaboration with you and White Wolf. Elaine
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Darren White
Date: 1/27/2017 12:12:00 AM
Thank you Elain, White Wolf and I write good together, we love this sonnet very much
Date: 1/13/2017 10:23:00 PM
ohhhhh I love it! you and white wolf write such beautiful poems together!!!
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Darren White
Date: 1/14/2017 1:20:00 AM
It's a beautiful poem, this, and I love it.
Date: 1/13/2017 11:56:00 AM
Nothing wrong with dreaming in a broken world...love your vision here
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Darren White
Date: 1/13/2017 12:16:00 PM
Dreaming is what I do a large part of the day, it's why I write poetry, it's why I smile, and how I made friends. Thanks Tim :)
Date: 1/13/2017 10:18:00 AM
Very nicely penned Darren...I like the smithereens line..best wishes
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Darren White
Date: 1/13/2017 11:30:00 AM
Thank you Jospeh, I love this sonnet we have written together.

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