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The Twilight Moor

Gazing out upon dusky barren moor, Where gray grass grasps the air Finding no purchase but sad allure Straight stalks elapse their endless despair. Teased by tales of golden reach Tricked by gales, whose song they preach. Redtail’s velvet wings breach the sky, Maroon lips who kiss the grass Stirring the song, its desperate sigh Catching the words, her beak of crystal glass Behind her, midnight shadow draws Fells her beauty with unseen charcoal paws Scarlet tears dampen the earth below Nurture the roots held by dusty truth Finally, the wind, gray grass’ will bestow The hawk once, now the fountain of youth. Litany of silence reigns in dusky glare, Each blade bowed in mournful prayer.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 2/15/2016 7:28:00 PM
AVERY, Enjoyed the way you expressed every line. Please keep writing and sharing your poetry. LOVE LINDA
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Date: 8/1/2015 10:11:00 AM
My friend this poems sings out to be read! The imagery is awesome and the message superb!!! Super 7 on this jewel..
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Avery Swarthout
Date: 8/1/2015 2:40:00 PM
Thanks so much for that epic praise! Best, Avery
Date: 6/10/2015 5:54:00 PM
Avery, I really like THIS. Mouth music, imagery and the figurative language rocks! My advice will seem odd... lol... to drop some of the filler words in a few lines and yet add them to another. The first line tripped me up... I suggest: "Gazing out upon the dusky, barren moor," & the second line "Where gray grass grasps air." Air doesn't really need a "the." "Maroon lips which kiss grass" (by the way, lines 9 and 10? GENIUS!) That's it... this is really GREAT poetry. Stunning work!
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Date: 6/9/2015 11:54:00 PM
Avery:) congrats on your workshop poem
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Date: 5/27/2015 5:33:00 PM
Avery. Enjoyed reading your latest, Hugs SKAT
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Avery Swarthout
Date: 5/27/2015 11:26:00 PM
I'm so glad you liked it! Best, Avery

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