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The Siren Sergeant -

One day while marching on the road to madness I fell in love with a woman known as sadness, she rode up on the shore glazed in sapphire honey, knowing no mercy slapping the land, forgiveness in her thought, studed destruction in her hand, our wit and sheilds calashing, the battle a draw - together - we as one collapsing to the sand, we engaged in hot behavior but the game was always in her favor - J.A.B. %

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Date: 7/7/2013 9:45:00 PM
Oh JB...I love this one...beautifully penned...thank you for sharing this..
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Justin Bordner
Date: 7/11/2013 1:39:00 PM
Thanks Shirley - aggressive love is always hot - J.A.B. %
Date: 1/3/2013 6:20:00 AM
Wouldn't we all love to be sirens, to be that irresisible force that conquers the odds, and have men grovelling at our feet. Ah well, I'm not realistic too often but my nether world has its purpose. Thanks for the dream Justin, a wonderful start for the new year.
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Justin Bordner
Date: 1/3/2013 5:36:00 PM
You are a dream of wisdom for me Elizabeth - thank you - J.A.B.%
Date: 11/4/2012 7:23:00 AM
Saluts to the "Siren Sergeant", Justin?:) Sounds like she keeps you on your toes and keeps your pen dancing. This is poetry you write of? Hope you''ve had a grand weekend! Love, Mikki
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Justin Bordner
Date: 11/4/2012 1:44:00 PM
She is an Archtype Mikki, and also the embodiment of powerful women I have become aware of in my life - poetry is my life Mikki - J.A.B. %
Date: 11/4/2012 7:22:00 AM
Saluts to the "Siren Sergeant", Justin?:) Sounds like she keeps you on your toes and keeps your pen dancing. This is poetry you write of? Hope you''ve had a grand weekend! Love, Mikki
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Justin Bordner
Date: 11/4/2012 1:49:00 PM
It is so nice to have back Mikki - thanks for caring - J.A.B. %
Date: 10/24/2012 11:16:00 AM
5 stars good imagry a dark lilt to it with an under lay of romance very nice hope to read more of your work soon
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Justin Bordner
Date: 10/24/2012 11:12:00 PM
Thanks Wolf, glad you like this battle of romance - your comment makes me proud - J.A.B. %
Date: 10/23/2012 9:09:00 AM
Very nice... thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Love the last stanza...women always wins I guess. Awesome stuff. Thank you for stopping by my page.
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Justin Bordner
Date: 10/23/2012 11:31:00 AM
This piece is like a hovel in my poetic architectual repertoire but it has much import in regards to my youth - sometimes hovels & huts provide much comfort - I am pleased that you like the spice of it Jonas - J.A.B. %
Date: 10/21/2012 11:46:00 PM
An unlucky roll of the dice...? Fantastic imagery here!
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Justin Bordner
Date: 10/22/2012 6:28:00 PM
I have never been unlucky Drake, but sometimes I've been too ignorant to realize how lucky I've been - I haven't lost the game, its just in her favor my friend - the imagery and skill in this piece are simple but also rich in ways, I appreciate your compliment - J.A.B. %
Date: 10/21/2012 1:41:00 PM
Sadness or depression is not good company for sure..I like the way that you expressed the topic..Very creative and descriptive work...Thanks for stopping by..I have finished my work "Luna" now if you care to read it..Sara
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Justin Bordner
Date: 10/22/2012 6:31:00 PM
I certainly will revisit Sara - sadness & depression are actually very efficient paths to enlightenment for those disinclined to wallow in those profitable states of mind - J.A.B. %
Date: 10/18/2012 7:04:00 PM
passion and sadness always seem to go together and it always appears as if the other has the upper hand...i enjoyed this write and loved the images in the second stanza! Nicely penned!
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Justin Bordner
Date: 10/19/2012 6:01:00 PM
One tends to follow the other, and unfortunatley, sadness typically has the longer life span because passion makes such an intense and ephemeral appearence in our lives Sandra - J.A.B. %
Date: 10/18/2012 2:32:00 PM
I like that. Sadness as a hot merciless woman! you are so right, many times it all ends in sadness. I really enjoyed this one from you. Your title is cool too! (I enjoyed your term for my last poem as using "misdirection.")
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Justin Bordner
Date: 10/19/2012 5:57:00 PM
As you well know Andrea poetry is a science along with being a divine art - mischevious women are always hot, and Sirens are the epitome - J.A.B. %
Date: 10/16/2012 1:30:00 PM
Justin, you held my attention from the word go. Absolutely enjoyed your write tonight, love the title you chose ;)
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Justin Bordner
Date: 10/17/2012 1:54:00 PM
She held my attention too Wilma - thanks for the love - J.A.B. %
Date: 10/15/2012 8:24:00 AM
nice descriptions - I really love that 2nd stanza :)
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Justin Bordner
Date: 10/15/2012 8:43:00 AM
Thanks Susan - 'studed destruction' always gets me thinking deeply - J.A.B. %
Date: 10/15/2012 6:07:00 AM
Justin it is well written, but soooo sad. - Have a lovely new week! - oxox Anne-Lise :)
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Justin Bordner
Date: 10/15/2012 8:29:00 AM
No Yasmin, I am happy because I trust in my myself - this poem and Premenstrual Syndrome are experimental pieces in rapid free association writing for me - I think they have value - Calashing is not a word, its actually onomatopoeia - J.A.B. %
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Justin Bordner
Date: 10/15/2012 8:23:00 AM
Well Anne, we had something to give to each other - J.A.B. %
Date: 10/14/2012 11:00:00 PM
Brilliantly penned---as usual, my friend. Enjoyed every bit of this decadent poem. ^^ Careful on that road to madness--it's a bumpy trail... :S Always, Laura
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Justin Bordner
Date: 10/15/2012 8:36:00 AM
Thank you so much Laura - I was born in madness, its a tail I've treked forever, and it always has something to give - sometimes the trail is erriely calm too - J.A.B. %
Date: 10/14/2012 8:18:00 PM
Hola, Justin stopping by to say hi, and that i miss stopping by,, sorry I have not been around in days. I'm having family trauma.. However, i will fully return in a few days, I'm only stopping by to make sure you do not forget me..JK... About your poem: i fully am aware of the ranking one can draw while passion is in full control. She needs a crown ;-)... always~ PD
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Justin Bordner
Date: 10/15/2012 8:42:00 AM
I don't think Deity would allow me to forget my Sphinx - I have missed your meaningful voice - my adoration is her crown, and her inspiraion is mine - J.A.B. %

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