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The Proposal

Confide I want you for My bride Don’t rush … Think about it Lips brush Caress Breathless murmur Says YES! Jan Allison 24th November 2014 Contest: Whispers of a muse Sponsor: Nette Onclaud Checked using ‘How many Syllables’ 2, 4, 2 ~awarded 4th place~

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John Fleming

Date: 12/25/2014 10:20:00 AM

Rather sweet poem; nice concept. :) john.

Jan Allison
Date: 12/25/2014 2:54:00 PM

thanks John:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 12/8/2014 8:39:00 AM

That one moment when love, excitement, passion, and hope all come together with that one word...you captured it beautifully, Jan! Congrats to you!! Hugs, Rhonda

Jan Allison
Date: 12/8/2014 10:52:00 AM

Thanks so much Rhonda:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 12/6/2014 11:35:00 PM

Nicely done, congrats on the win Jan...huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 12/7/2014 5:12:00 AM

Thanks so much Kayod5 for your lovely comment:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/4/2014 7:09:00 PM

gosh this one somehow got away from me and i had never noticed it posted. Was ait posted extra early or late? VERY good one, Jan. So romantic. Congrats.

Jan Allison
Date: 12/4/2014 7:11:00 PM

cant remember when it was posted - glad you found it and enjoyed it that is the main thing:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 12/4/2014 4:18:00 AM

Wow quite a passionate write Jan! Congrats on big win!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/4/2014 4:29:00 AM

Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan x

Hija De La Luna

Date: 12/4/2014 2:41:00 AM

congratulations, Jan! love it!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/4/2014 4:28:00 AM

Thanks so much Hija:-) Hugs Jan x

Joseph May

Date: 12/3/2014 10:04:00 PM

beautiful...Congrats on your win Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 12/4/2014 4:28:00 AM

Thanks so much Joseph:-) Hugs Jan xx

David Mohn

Date: 12/3/2014 7:38:00 PM

Back for congrats Jan...this was one of my favorites

Jan Allison
Date: 12/4/2014 4:27:00 AM

Thanks so much for your lovely comment David:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 12/3/2014 3:01:00 PM

Hi Jan, love your sweet proposal, and especially,"breathless murmur says yes." Congratulations on your nice win! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 12/3/2014 3:07:00 PM

Thanks so much Sandra:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 12/3/2014 10:25:00 AM

Hi Jan...you not only gave this a try, but also came out with flying colours! Congratulations on a well deserved win! // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 12/3/2014 10:43:00 AM

Thanks so much as ever for your continued support:-) Hugs jan xxx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 12/3/2014 10:09:00 AM

you excite and thrill me with this breathless murmur, jan... thanks for being part of my contest with bright congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/3/2014 10:41:00 AM

Thanks so much Nette:-) Hugs jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 12/3/2014 9:57:00 AM

Oops, I had already Faved it, good for me!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/3/2014 10:41:00 AM

:-) you are too kind my friend:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 12/3/2014 9:55:00 AM

Congratulations on another great win for you. A Fav!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/3/2014 10:40:00 AM

Thanks so much Maurice:-) Hugs Jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 12/3/2014 9:20:00 AM

Dropping back with my congratulations Jan. You have once again risen to the occasion. XXOO

Jan Allison
Date: 12/3/2014 9:21:00 AM

ooh has it been judged - thanks for being barer of good news my friend:-) hugs jan xxx

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 12/1/2014 5:49:00 AM

truly beautiful pen jan love how it drew for me

Jan Allison
Date: 12/1/2014 7:31:00 AM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment Liam:-) hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/26/2014 7:40:00 AM

I am not familiar with the form but I like the piece. Good luck in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/26/2014 8:22:00 AM

it's one Nette found for us Richard - i love the challenge of the short forms she finds for us:-) hugs jan xxx

Paul Callus

Date: 11/25/2014 5:20:00 PM

Well done Jan! This is one contest I would like to take part in, but am so busy at the moment; I'll have to write while I sleep! hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 11/25/2014 5:25:00 PM

It really is a challenging form Paul but I thought i would give it a try:-) Hugs jan xxx

Rosemond Mensah

Date: 11/25/2014 12:07:00 PM

Don’t rush … Think about it Lips brush very good poem you are well done

Jan Allison
Date: 11/25/2014 12:10:00 PM

Thank you so much for your lovely comment Rosemond:-) hugs jan xx

David Meade

Date: 11/25/2014 11:12:00 AM

Almost missed this -- it was so quite. It's amazing how whispers make the heart scream for joy!!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/25/2014 11:53:00 AM

Thanks so much David I enjoyed the challenge Nette set I hope I have done it correctly:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/25/2014 9:21:00 AM

Let me whisper this in your ear - (i love it)

Jan Allison
Date: 11/25/2014 11:53:00 AM

aww thanks you so much Maurice, I am so glad you enjoyed it - it is a challenging form:-) Hugs Jan xx

Hija De La Luna

Date: 11/25/2014 6:23:00 AM

i enjoyed this, Jan! beautiful!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/25/2014 6:35:00 AM

Thanks Hija it's a very challenging form! Hugs jan xx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 11/24/2014 11:52:00 PM

Lovely, Jan! Yours is the first entry I've seen for this contest...you have set the bar high! Hugs, Rhonda

Jan Allison
Date: 11/25/2014 1:03:00 AM

I think I was the first one in the contest Rhonda - its a challenging form! Hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/24/2014 11:10:00 PM

This one is stellar Jan! I hope it wins BIG!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/25/2014 1:03:00 AM

Thanks Connie for the lovely comment:-) Hugs jan x

Iris E. S-Lewis

Date: 11/24/2014 8:38:00 PM

Jan, Simply beautiful little gems. I anticipated more by virtue of the title; then, surprise! cute 2,4,2 verse. Thanks for taking the time to add your kind comment.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/25/2014 1:02:00 AM

Thanks Iris - its the first time I've seen and tried this form and its quite a challenge:-) Hugs jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 11/24/2014 8:18:00 PM

Well done with so few syllables. Not an easy one but you did it. XOXO

Jan Allison
Date: 11/25/2014 1:01:00 AM

It's really challenging Brenda but I've given it a go:-) Hugs jan xx