The Promise

Today's my 30th birthday and he promised to celebrate
 "We'll dance the night away and  NO... I won't be late!"
It was me who needed him as he scurried out the door
"I have to go!  I'm late!  You're pretty as before!"


This was different from other days as my heart took flight
To  watch the man I love soon disappear from sight 
It must be insecurity when a birthday rolls around?
Or is it simply "Over" for that's the excuse I found?

Thumbing through my closet,  zip a black sexy dress
Even without makeup and though my hair a mess
I'd just answer the door before they beat it down
Knew I'd find approval for my perfect birthday gown!

"Yes just a moment . . .I'm coming to the door"  
"Mam, there's been an accident. You'll need to tell us more"
"So Sorry for your loss. . . please come with me"
Broken promise, Perfect gown, Dressed appropriately....



4/30/13
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 5/8/2013 2:38:00 AM
wow, this is real heartbreaker, full of tension but a wonderful write, really superb, well done. Have a blessed day, Gordon
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Date: 5/3/2013 2:48:00 PM
Judy....I'm floored. Floored, I tell you. What an awesome, sad, romantic write. Awesome. About the Love Letter suggestion, I've already entered. My entry is My Love Letter to Him. Thanks for thinking of me! :)
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Date: 5/1/2013 11:22:00 PM
Talk about broken promise! Touching full of anticipation with such a twist! Beautifully written and you so YOUNG! Thank you! Giassou!
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Date: 5/1/2013 2:32:00 PM
Impressive write... Happy born day...~A.O
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Date: 4/30/2013 3:14:00 PM
Wow Judy, this sure pulls the emotions, what a wonderful poem, and i like the visual aspect also...
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