The Moon, the Swan, the Rose

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Author's Notes: "The Moon, The Swan, The Rose" is a tri-authored and tri-conceived Unrhymed Tercet write with my colleagues, Anne-Lise Andresen and Liam McDaid, and me. This particular poem was completed on September 2, 2015 and was posted earlier to Poetry Soup, first by Anne-Lise, and then by Liam. For anyone who missed their earlier postings of this wonderful three-way write between each of us -- well, here it is again. It was my distinct pleasure to have the opportunity once again work with my dear friends and colleagues on this radiant and enchanting poem. I know that the three of us were quite pleased with the final result of our mutual efforts on this majestic theme set to God's divine purpose and intention. (Gary Bateman - September 20, 2015) (Unrhymed Tercet) (A Collaborated Poem)

Categories: beauty, dream, fantasy, heaven, imagery, magic, and metaphor.

The Moon, The Swan, The Rose I see an enchanted image that you’ve never dreamed of With reflections twinkling while dancing on wave drops Of a dreamy blue lake that is a mirror of one white swan A dancing beauty with a pureness that blesses this water She floats like a princess with such an elegance and grace As splendor ripples through a lens of her divine existence A canvas painting as one masterpiece beyond compare As the moonlight manifests a sweet rose in my dreams Beautiful to desire now that nothing shall be disturbed Within a frozen memory a brilliant diamond illuminates As the full moon’s image enters the depths of her soul And a sad, certain loneliness leaves her spirit exhausted Arising before my eyes on the wings of angels I see all Clearly now with an excited, fluttering magical heartbeat Believe me—that this eternal blue sky is incredibly real With a golden orb of light colors reflecting so exquisitely Now as majestic images of God’s Heaven appear above I see His very image of the Moon, the Swan, and the Rose Anne-Lise Andresen, Gary Bateman, and Liam McDaid A Collaborated Poem, Copyright © All Rights Reserved September 2, 2015 (Unrhymed Tercet)

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Sharon Gulley

Date: 10/19/2015 2:10:00 PM

Excellent just excellent is all I can say... A (7) for me.....Sharon and a fav as well.

Gary Bateman
Date: 10/20/2015 12:02:00 PM

Thanks Sharon!! Thanks for the 7 + FAV!! Anne-Lise, Liam, and I combined our talents on this one, but I derived the idea for this wonderful poem from a picture image that Anne-Lise had sent me in an e-mail that showed a Swan floating in a quite lake setting by the light of a full moon. Always interesting to see how these writes get created!! Best Always, Gary

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/21/2015 9:03:00 AM

- A pleasure to read again .... and again :) - thank my friends Gary and Liam - hugs //Anne-Lise :)

Gary Bateman
Date: 9/21/2015 10:55:00 AM

Hello Anne-Lise!! Thanks for your note and your read again of our very pleasurable co-written work here. (I decided to go ahead and post it again so we could get some further exposure for it since it's such a wonderfully conceived and written poem.) Thanks again to you and Liam for all of your work and support on this magnificent write!! Cheers and Best, Gary

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 9/20/2015 5:40:00 PM

Hi Gary, Liam n' Anne-Lise!Another very beautiful romantic,captivating love poem written by you my dearest friends.Just dazzling!So very beautifully written.Excellent!A true gem!I truly enjoyed it.A very beautiful,romantic, dreamy, sweet n' enchanting love poem to be held very close to my heart.smiling.Just awesome!I love it!Great imagery.Very beautiful collaboration!Very wonderful team work.A 7 to each!A fav!Your pens are truly mighty golden.Wishing you a very lovely week!In his light!God bless you always!:)Love n' hugs!xoxox D.^O^

Gary Bateman
Date: 9/21/2015 10:59:00 AM

Hello Dear "D" -- I thought a third post of this work on my behalf would gain a little more exposure for it. (Liam and Anne-Lise had posted it nearly three weeks ago on PS.) I know that all three of us enjoyed putting this one together. And thanks, as always, for your wonderful words and support and for the "TR" + FAV!! This one appeared to be a very smooth and seamless write when we finished it!! Cheers and Best Always to you "D"! -- G!

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/20/2015 3:23:00 PM

this just danced with the gold flowing in both your pens dazzles me each time i read passing you a warm smile pals

Gary Bateman
Date: 9/20/2015 3:26:00 PM

Thanks Liam Mate!! You already know my thoughts and feelings here on our three-way write with Dear Anne-Lise. Thanks for commenting on this wonderful Tercet!! Cheers and Best, Gary