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The Marionettes

A drop of tear like dew drop did fall, with pain in the heart like a sinking star. Like eyeless moths on the dark horizon, the looming image of sorrow drifts. The bridges move as I in stillness stand; time flies by and so doth the distance. Scramming like a ruthless vagabond, bonds of restraint seem to have no bounds. The world rests well and so must I knowing that tides roll past as destiny moves by. Birth, life or death, we are just puppets on loose strings; held by a power above. Till fate moves on, let us dance our dance, like the last standing dew drops on the blade of grass.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 6/3/2011 2:37:00 PM
Congrats anjith on your HM in the monopoly contest with this wonderful write luv.. enjoy..
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Date: 6/3/2011 11:50:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win in Judy's "Monopoly" contest Ajith. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/3/2011 11:16:00 AM
Many congrats Ajith on clinching well deserved HM in Judy's contest. Luv & best wishes - Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 6/3/2011 9:15:00 AM
My congratulations on the win in the contest of judy, ajith
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Date: 6/3/2011 8:43:00 AM
Thank you for entering my contest
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Date: 6/3/2011 5:35:00 AM
My congratulations on the win in the contest of deb, ajith
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Date: 6/3/2011 5:23:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Debbie's "Jack Out Of Box" contest Ajith. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/2/2011 5:17:00 PM
CONGRATULATIONS!!! For the honorable mention... well-deserved win... ***jun-jun
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Date: 6/2/2011 3:48:00 PM
congrats ajith on your HM in Debbie's contest with this excellent entry luv.. enjoy special honor..
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Date: 5/24/2011 8:00:00 AM
The poem contains beautiful and relevant images. "Till fate moves on, let us dance our dance, like the last standing dew drops on the blade of grass." is a fitting climax. Excellent effort! Do publish more poems.
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Date: 5/23/2011 3:01:00 PM
I really like this, the term personification it means discribing an inanimant object as having the traits of a human & I think? you have done just the opposite? So, to be personification you would say The dew fell like a tear from a mother's eye/ The dew drop fell like a tear/ and/or the star sank below the horizon like a heartache...it's a very evocative verse!! You can leave it as is just I'd relable it free verse & break the second & third line from the bottom into smaller parts.
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Ajith Fredjeev
Date: 5/23/2011 9:56:00 PM
Thank you Debbie for that point and point is well received. However, just to play the Devil's advocate... don't you think that the title "The Marionette" is the inanimate that has been attempted to be personified? yeah you are right the last bit of it needs to be split and might actually sounf better... new to this site so trying to navigate into the editing bit...

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