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The Maid, the Magpie and the Mirror

Gazing, at its own reflection is the Magpie. A magic bird, a mystical creature, with a soul and the power to see things, the power of scrying. It sees a tomb in ancient Egypt. It sees death. A soul locked within a glorious bronze mirror, Cleopatra and her Maid in a bond unbroken. Time passes in silence as deep as the unbroken promise of endless wisdom, gifted by the Magpie. whose caws the Maid hears, within the depths of the mirror, calls to the Queen, her Cleopatra, to her soul. Magpie speaks to She on the Eastern Barge in the afterlife of death, and to her Maid entombed. The sacred bird so near scrys. The Magpie sits within oasis staring into the pool. It scrys for all this time, its vigil, its protection, never broken. Even when the sarcophagus is carried to the necropolis of the dead, without, unknown, the bird speaks wisely through reflection, her Magpie. Entombed, his Queen and her Maid, their bodies but not their souls, Queen, Maid and Magpie, each cast a last gaze, alive within the mirror. The Vows of Innocence, the Maid bespeaks the mirror. Pleas to the Swallower of Shades, both Queen and Maid have scried to The Burning One, and claim no lie, upon their soul. As the light dims within the Maids eyes, in tomb unbroken, she sees the life of her Queen and their Magpie pass fast upon the brass, last breath of life and dying. Oh, too soon the end, moans the Maid, I am dying. Her life's reflection moves bronzed upon the mirror. She screams, "My Queen," but hears only the caw of Magpie. All around her other servants succumb and cry, whilst she sits scrying, and the Magpie flies above in life entombed, eternity, unbroken. As she beseeches all the Gods to save her soul. The Magpie's spirit self moves within the mirror's soul. He swoops gathering Cleopatra's essence, past the dying, and brings her to the Maids side unbroken. In afterlife upon the Eastern Barge they join the mirrored whole, for he, the bird of magic, Magpie, has called and scried it so. Part light of life, part dark of death, the Magpie. The essence of each entwine united within this eternal mirror for the Magpie cannot bear their deaths. He will protect and forever scry in life the mirror sits unbroken a stolen bauble, and in it they dwell with the Magpie.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 8/6/2010 12:29:00 AM
If "Pink Shoelaces" is open, Debbie, I will try that one. Agape, Moses
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Date: 8/5/2010 5:54:00 PM
Okay, a real critique? Well, Caws in verse 2 could easily be mistaken for a proper noun -the name of a character a la Disney. This is just a smidgin thick. smacks of purple prose narration.this could be a virtue as this reads well out loud, but does not flow impeccably on paper. I would lose the comma after AS, in verse 5. I hate doing this because someone always gets angry and they hate you for it. I'll do Yakety Yak/ Charlie Brown if you like as I admire the Coasters. Do I do one or both?
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Date: 8/5/2010 4:00:00 PM
She on the bridge is the maids Goddess Cleopatra so we used the She....Her? wouldn't sound right a bit of poetic license?
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Date: 8/5/2010 3:01:00 PM
just read your blog and noticed I was supposed to make a REAL critque. I can't critique ANYone's poem, Deb, but I can tell you a little grammar thingie!! Second stanza, it should be speaks to HER, not speaks to She. Afte a preposition, use objects and object pronouns, not subjects. Other than that, I think the rest of it was grammatically well done!!
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Date: 8/5/2010 2:50:00 PM
Ok, I read this one, Deb. For the life of me, I don't know why you enjoy writing a sestina. However, it makes the writer look amazingly skilled!!! My critique to you is this: For every ONE sestina, write lots and lots of limericks for me, sweetie. This is very good writing, but it kind of makes my head start to spin. so much to take in. I prefer your dirty limericks! Luv, Andrea (Teen angel) Was I supposed to say it right here?
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Date: 8/5/2010 2:33:00 PM
For some odd reason, I am totally enchanted with this poem~ I just cannot stop reading it~ what an amazing job you did~ I mean we did~ you know dear heart you are the Queen of the Sestina's to me ~I will treasure the experience we shared in writing this masterwork together for all my years~~ it was an amazing experience ~~now for your contest Summertime Sum Sum.. I would like to do my poem on the song ~~Teen Angel ~~ I hope there is a spot left for me~~~
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Date: 8/5/2010 11:28:00 AM
Wow this sure was a wonderful co-write with Constance! I was totally gripped with the story and I really enjoyed it-- it was like watching a movie actually-- this sestina came across as quite vivid for me and it's a bit haunting in a way too-- sure am glad I read this :) -- nikko :) btw I listened to Pink Shoelaces and just fell in love with it--first time I heard it & I was laughing--so cute! can that be my inspiration please? thanks :)
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Date: 7/28/2010 10:57:00 PM
Wow, you two. This is an amazing write! It takes me right where I enjoy being...to a place of intrigue. And it makes me want MORE similar writes to read! Lovingly, Dane Ann
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Date: 7/19/2010 2:06:00 PM
Wow this is beautiful...ESP.. as I am now living in Egypt>>>You write amazingly well! Light, love, and blessings.
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Date: 7/17/2010 5:07:00 AM
Terrific write girls, wonderful poetry from two fantastic poets >> James
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Date: 7/15/2010 11:26:00 PM
Debbie, my contest calls for single five line verses only.Thanks for your interest in my endeavours.Rgds Brian.Have a good weekend.
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Date: 7/15/2010 4:33:00 PM
So I see u title it differently from Constance .. its brilliant and clever .. enjoyed this difficult piece but a wonderful end result and collaboration.. watch for her and mine next.. with luv..
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