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The silence between them, is visually keen while the sound from the tires, is picking up speed With her head turned away, she is called to the window where poles along the roadside, cast ominous shadows The drone of the highway stifiles air all around them and has filled up the muteness with an apocalypse wind Far down the freeway, nestled like hives are the small housing tracts, tiny houses alive Burning the night, like unreachable stars She imagines a couple, sharing a table sharing their day, while children would play Where every small thing, was sorted and labeled Where people shared dinner, together are able, to know with assurance that nothing will change Her hands in her lap, and fingers are numb Bemused she will wonder where her body has gone All the signs, sights, silhouettes seem depleted She takes a deep breath, as the car travels on There's a sound of a sigh, and a world passing by The road going home....is a road that is long _______________________________________________ Submitted for the contest: Melancholy Sponsored by Nayda Ivette Negron _______________________________________________

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Date: 9/30/2016 5:51:00 PM
A beautiful gasping write of vivid memories. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 9/28/2016 3:21:00 PM
Such a sad poem, Carrie. The 'melancholy' comes alive along this 'long, dark road.' Congratulations on your well-deserved First Place win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 9/28/2016 3:12:00 AM
Very sad write, apt for this contest, I love the last line, Carrie:) Congratulations on your top win:)
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Date: 9/27/2016 9:01:00 PM
Congratulations, Carrie!
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Date: 9/27/2016 8:40:00 PM
To me, this is excellent. I am no longer surprised when I find myself in your poems, my undefined feelings expressed as though you sorted the lines from my private wonderments. Nope, not surprised any longer, but awed, amazed and, I think, grateful. Your writes often serve me as only poetry can and is, at its best, intended to do. FAV ... 7 ... Appreciation ... CayCay
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Date: 9/27/2016 12:58:00 PM
This is a very lonely poem. You can feel it because it is well written a 7.
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Date: 9/27/2016 11:41:00 AM
Sad, reflective car ride with scenery so instructive. Nice write, Carrie. Congrats! :-)
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Date: 9/27/2016 9:45:00 AM
Congratulations Carrie on the placement of the contest
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Date: 9/27/2016 9:41:00 AM
Carrie, this is perfect for this theme, I am so glad to read this...Congrats on your well deserved top placement :)-luloo
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Date: 5/30/2016 9:34:00 PM
Another winner? I'm not surprised. Congrats.
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Date: 11/10/2015 11:36:00 AM
Carrie, Congratulations on your awesome win. SKAT
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Date: 11/9/2015 10:23:00 PM
Love the bleak feel to this, Carrie. We're all being taken somewhere, and the destination is not necessarily of our choosing. Great write. Well done. Viv x
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Date: 11/9/2015 6:42:00 PM
Congratulations! One of the best.
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Date: 11/5/2015 7:01:00 PM
A truly fine poem that sets deep images to ponder. Life and its fears are with us all and the great fear of our fateful, ending day travels with us daily. A7
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Date: 11/5/2015 1:06:00 AM
enjoyed this write Carry, good luck in the contest, ~Luv Linda
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