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The Firmament of My Heaven-Ii-W

The work, the words The worries, the wits They are lazy today They have been sleeping too long In my body In the broad way of my heart. I think about you in the heavy traffic I lay bare my desire I search the bodies of A vowel, a consonant, a simile An oxymoron, a metaphor To find a two-syllable title I breathe in their mouths With the thoughts I have in mind I whisper into their ears To hear the echoes of the words To compose and feel the sound effect With overflowing ideas in head I touch the curved lips To get you mold Deep in the vault of your mouth I feel you and hear you. They’re awake, but lethargic Spreading the page incoherently They mean to frustrate me As they are feeling mean Dancing in different shapes Splattered on my page. ************** Dr. Ram Mehta ========================= Based on Surrealism Eighth place win in : Contest: Real, UNreal and Surreal sponsored by Debbie Guzzi

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Date: 4/24/2011 2:27:00 PM
Congrats on your win Dr Ram!
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Date: 4/21/2011 4:35:00 PM
Way to go Dr Ram, Congratulations on your success in the winner circle. Agape, Moses
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Date: 4/21/2011 3:34:00 PM
Wow. Absolutely enjoyed this wonderful write. Creative and unique! Warm congrats on your well deserved win, and thank you always for being so kind to me. Most appreciated. Love, shar
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Date: 4/21/2011 3:00:00 PM
Congratulations, Dr. Ram....on your win, in Debbie's surreal themed contest....a heartful poem this is! And many thanks for your kind comments!
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Date: 4/21/2011 11:39:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest Dr. Ram. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/21/2011 11:09:00 AM
Congrats, Dr. Ram....great entry! Ellen <3
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Date: 4/21/2011 9:50:00 AM
Many congrats on your win, Dr Ram : )
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Date: 4/21/2011 7:54:00 AM
Congr4ats Dr. Ram on your stupendous win in Debbie's contest with this extraordinary entry my friend.. enjoy another well deserved top spot ..luv..
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Date: 4/21/2011 7:27:00 AM
Totally enchanting Dr. Ram. Many warm congrats for this terrific write and win.
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Date: 4/19/2011 5:53:00 AM
Impressive expression of your innermost thoughts Dr. Ram.. excellent entry for the new contest.. I have no ideas for this one just yet... so busy with others right now..good luck ..this is elelgant ...thankxx for your wonderful comments always uplifting to the "Sweetheart"..
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Date: 4/19/2011 4:30:00 AM
This is brilliant Dr Ram ,loved the searching for vowels, metaphors...and two syllable title. getting a feeling of Deja vu, this is what I've been doing lately on my way to work..:)) Good luck with this amazing piece. Regards,Gautami
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Date: 4/18/2011 11:58:00 PM
Dr. Ram, I am very impressed!
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Date: 4/18/2011 4:54:00 PM
love it
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Date: 4/18/2011 2:38:00 PM
Dr. Ram, your splattered page is a Jackson Pollock. ~ Soulfire ~
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Date: 4/18/2011 2:03:00 PM
Congrats on all your wins! Good luck in this contest!
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Date: 4/18/2011 12:55:00 PM
An awesome one Dr. Ram, loved the route you took with this one. Wishing you all the best for the contest. Thank you for the congratulations on my lifetime membership win ;)
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Date: 4/18/2011 9:25:00 AM
This is very beautiful.
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Date: 4/18/2011 9:22:00 AM
Lovely poem.
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Date: 4/18/2011 9:08:00 AM
Wonderful Doc... This tale sprung from words to create a cinema in my head... Excellent write my friend....:JP]
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