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Sunset At Manila Bay

Walking on the street, stretching out both my arms to catch the breeze looking silly, but I don't mind... 'silly' could very well be my middle name... Closing my eyes as the sun was dipping goodbye just for a quick bit though, (I reckon I'm not that silly), since I wasn't walking on a sidewalk, since there was none in that part... wishing I was sitting instead, or in that place where I can swim in that Manila Bay sunset, immerse myself stare, drink that shimmering orange yolk that bleeds light watching it dip softly into the languid waves, rendering brilliance, gilding everything a golden inked cookie from the milky sky being dunked, tickling my hungry eyes ah, the glorious, soul-filling Manila Bay sunset -------------------------------- I continue my walk home and I sigh, I sleep at sunrise. 0528200913 I have a big feeling I will be writing a different version of this, I was walking on that street, wishing I was watching the sunset near Manila Bay but yup, this was something that I wrote when I couldn't sleep so wasn't able to fully grasp what I wanted to be conveyed, it lacks something, I don't know, just Something. Thank you for passing by.

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Date: 7/29/2014 9:25:00 AM
You have painted a beautiful picture of the Manila Bay Sunset. It must be beautiful to watch. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla
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Date: 12/10/2013 1:45:00 AM
"Walking on the street,stretching out both my arms to catch the breeze looking silly, but I don't mind... 'silly' could very well be my middle name..." I love this image of you. Be the girl you are/ You are glorious.. The images are so brilliant throughout, I'd want to keep them close to my heart. Love to you, my darling girl!!!
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Date: 9/5/2013 3:33:00 PM
Hi Nikko, i'm much calm right now...LOL,,, have you heard from David W.. :-( miss him... ps..thank you for walking me through the sunset on your avatar... it's beautiful...xox~ Linda
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Date: 7/30/2013 12:48:00 AM
still loving this one and its imagery!!! And yes, you are so right about the first version of my free verse poem. Put up a new poem, pretty please?
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Date: 6/19/2013 8:29:00 AM
Pretty awesome poetry written because you couldn't sleep. Beautiful imagery with such originality. :)
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Date: 6/17/2013 3:10:00 PM
Sunsets and sunrises are each unique and beautiful..Enjoyed reading your descriptive work.Thanks for your visit to my work..Your review was uplifting.Sara
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Date: 6/12/2013 1:04:00 PM
like you, i'm still enthralled by our own sunset.. kahit umuulan, i watch it when am nearby... and your lines give much glory to one of the world;s most beautiful sunsets.. yun lang, so many new buildings around it... purrfetct, nikks!..:) huggs
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Date: 6/11/2013 12:31:00 PM
This is a beauty Missy, love how you took me with you on this journey even if you wrote it when you couldn't sleep ;) *mwahugs*
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Date: 6/11/2013 10:35:00 AM
Hey nikko, this is so good, just love the tropical feeling of your poetry, you inject such inspiration,,
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Date: 6/10/2013 5:49:00 AM
Maganda ang iyong tula! Beautiful poem! Keep writing!
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Date: 6/10/2013 5:48:00 AM
Maganda ang iyong tula! Beautiful poem! Keep writing!
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Date: 6/10/2013 5:47:00 AM
Maganda ang iyong tula! Beautiful poem! Keep writing!
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Date: 6/8/2013 2:41:00 PM
Hello sweet Nikko..I wish I could watch the sunset in Manilla bay..it must be awesome.Did i ever tell you i had a physiotherapist when I had my slip.disc from Manilla? She s married to a maltese doctors.She used to describe the besutiful islands there are.If you ever come to Malta i will invite you and her together at our place.She s a sweet lady just like you. Lovely poem..Sometimes before sleeping your muse tickle your senses to paint with.words of beauty..awesome
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 6/8/2013 2:42:00 PM
doctor i meant hehe
Date: 5/31/2013 1:24:00 PM
Howdy Nikko...I like this the way it is...it feels like you...not that i know what you feel like...hahaha. I'd love to see a Manila Bay sunset. Its funny how different sunsets can look in different parts of the world.
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Date: 5/30/2013 3:36:00 PM
oh, now I see why you ended it the way you did, because it was not a usual day for you! You were not able to sleep!!! I don't think it needs much revision because the middle part where you are describing it as yolk, etc. is simply outstanding. I think you should make it known to us that you are having trouble sleeping. You could do that in the beginning, and then the last line when we come to the ending, would completely make sense. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 5/29/2013 10:09:00 PM
Perhaps the poem needs revising but I think you have a potential "gem" here! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/30/2013 9:48:00 AM
Thank you, Matthew-- yes, I am leaning towards revising this-- there is something that I still want to capture, grasp? and haven't quite got it yet....
Date: 5/29/2013 4:03:00 AM
- Beautiful poem ! - Love the sunset! - Have a nice day. - (Feel free to read some of my poems) - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/30/2013 9:47:00 AM
I love sunsets too... enjoy your day as well Anne Lise and will pass by your poems. Thank you...
Date: 5/28/2013 8:20:00 PM
and I thought this account is inactive. welcome back ate/kuya?
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Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/30/2013 9:40:00 AM
medyo kalerky ka naman eh o_O -- "binibini" na nga, tapos P.ink pa. Hmmm sige pwede na rin na naniguro ka, given na baka pwedeng mala BB Gandang Hari ang peg ko... haha.
Date: 5/28/2013 6:43:00 PM
And I'm glad you posted it "as is"....I loved it "as is".........and when you wake up, you will see others do too !!! :) So glad to see you writing again!!!! Hugs!
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Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/30/2013 9:43:00 AM
Thank you for being so sweet, Carrie. I am inclined to edit this though, even just the formatting. Hugs right back to you!
Date: 5/28/2013 4:42:00 PM
Previously I used to post my poems using UC Browser from my Cell phone.But since the SUBMIT YOUR POEM page was modified ,I am unable to post my poems through that browser.
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Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/30/2013 9:42:00 AM
thanks for the ehads up, Kash.... yup, I was using my phone and opera....will go to your poem...
Date: 5/28/2013 4:40:00 PM
Beautiful poem here Nikko.I love this.Same thing happened with me(regarding formatting) when I posted my poem 'Sleepless nights' from my cell phone using Opera mini browser.Go and read the comments below that poem.
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