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Star-Crossed - For Love of Day, For Love of Night

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Star-Crossed - For Love of Day, For Love of Night

(this is a form called Swap Quatrain, where first line's phrases swap in the last line of each stanza) In shadows’ veils, at end of night, sweet Moon removes her modest light and softly, yet again, exhales - at end of night, in shadows’ veils. As she departs, her love’s released to climb the stairway to the east. They cannot meet to share their hearts. Her love’s released as she departs. She watches him while hid from view, the way he kisses morning’s dew, and sees gold rays spill from his rim. While hid from view, she watches him. Sad Moon, alone for centuries, with awe has watched Sun leave, cerise. while she, afar. . . how cold she’s grown! For centuries, sad moon alone. She takes his place so he may rest. And though forlorn, she’s always dressed in lace, for Luna has great grace. So he may rest, she takes his place. For love of night, for love of day, she can’t implore him that he sway from course. To be apart’s their plight. For love of day, for love of night.
By Andrea Dietrich/ This poem took first place in Shadowpoetry's annual Shadows Ink Contest from 2008. It appears in the Shadows Ink Poetry Chapbook, Series 2, Volume 5. As a result of that win, I received a chapbook deal worth around $300 at that time. (30 free copies with publication over at Shadowpoetry). Also, I entered it into my second PoetrySoup International Contest since I had joined Soup earlier in the year of 2010. It got an HM with a certificate. Soup no longer has their big Soup contests chosen by their staff. An HM was actually a really nice thing in those days because the contest was a HUGE deal and out of hundreds of members, there were only ten to twenty total winners. 2010 was probably my best year at PoetrySoup, and my win with this poem in July of 2010 was one of the reasons for that. I am forever grateful for the recognition I received from this poem.

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  1. Date: 8/30/2015 12:50:00 PM
    This is a stellar poetic achievement, especially so because you wrote it in a demanding form (Swap Quatrain). Little wonder it took first place in the referenced contest. Congratulations (well deserved). Hugs.

  1. Date: 7/10/2015 10:17:00 AM
    Andrea I stopped by this morning reading a few poems and I must say I was mesmerized by your words and great style I read each delightful verse with anticipatory eagerness. A great write my lady!

  1. Date: 6/13/2015 4:22:00 PM
    Great personification of sun and moon, Andrea! I read this a couple of times...beautiful! I see that through these past years this poem has served you well. Congratulations for a worthy podium finish! // paul

  1. Date: 6/13/2015 1:15:00 AM
    Andrea, Congratulations on your win. You placed well:) Alexis

  1. Date: 6/12/2015 10:31:00 PM
    Love he form Andrea, I remember their was a contest with this form some time ago...Congrats on a great write and win

  1. Date: 6/12/2015 9:45:00 PM
    Andrea, this one was one of my picks for this contest. Enjoy your second place win....SKAT

  1. Date: 5/12/2015 10:54:00 PM
    Simply an amazing poem Andrea! I marvel at your skill.

  1. Date: 5/12/2015 8:09:00 PM
    Speechless with wonder. What beauty flows from your pen. What a big big achievement to take first place in that competition and get published. When I look for various forms of poetry I often see your poems set as examples on Shadowpoetry. A poet of the highest order. A favorite.

  1. Date: 2/16/2015 2:28:00 AM
    Just beautiful! And impressive form.

  1. Date: 11/7/2014 7:28:00 AM
    Just brilliant, you take my breath away.

  1. Date: 10/18/2014 12:33:00 PM
    Once again. . . .amazing. . . .the more I read of your work the more I feel I shouldn't be here. . .your command of words, thought and emotion is such a gift. . .

  1. Date: 12/20/2010 3:52:00 PM
    Congrats on your win, Andrea. Dan C

  1. Date: 12/20/2010 8:50:00 AM
    Congratulations Andrea on your beautiful Personification's honored place. Agape, Moses

  1. Date: 12/1/2010 12:48:00 PM
    Congratulations on your win..Sara

  1. Date: 11/25/2010 11:02:00 PM
    My heartfelt congratulations, Andrea on your win in the Soup Contest. You paint the sun and the moon with the beautiful colors of your creative mind...that I can't distinguish reality from fantasy. It takes a poetess such as you to make personification as real as possible. Your poetical talent is a powerful tool to express your magical beauty. Enjoy another achievement and be proud. Have a Blessed and happy Thanksgiving with your loved ones. :) God loves you. Lots of love and hugs, Andrew.

  1. Date: 11/25/2010 3:21:00 AM
    Andrea - Big vow on being verge of hat-trick. expressive meaningful swaps... luv it... Many congrats on winning coveted spot in contest..... Happy Thanksgiving.... Luv & Best wishes.....Hitendra Mehta

  1. Date: 11/24/2010 9:41:00 PM
    Your weave your words like flowing silk. the images you draw with your pen are beyond praise. thank you for sharing your splendid gift. congratulations. keep them coming. luv Margaret

  1. Date: 11/24/2010 8:10:00 PM
    Andrea...such lilting splendor! BRAVO!!! and CONGRATS!!! jimbo

  1. Date: 11/24/2010 5:40:00 PM
    Andrea.I just love reading your work.I'm enthralled by your creative mind.The images you use here are so beautiful and your portrayals of the Sun and Moon take on a real personnification,so that we can can feel and sympathise with them.This is wonderful but then I've come to expect nothing less from you.I think you're a truly gifted poet.Congratulations on your win.Love June

  1. Date: 11/24/2010 1:46:00 PM
    Super yay for you Andrea ^_^! I am not surprised to see that you are among the winners and yup 2 poems at that ;) I really love this one, I think it is really a timeless classic and I am so happy that you won something for it ^_^ -- email you later when I get home ok? :) - hugs to you!

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