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Star-Crossed (For Love of Day, For Love of Night)

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Star-Crossed (For Love of Day, For Love of Night)

(this is a form called Swap Quatrain, where first
line's phrases swap in the last line of each stanza)

In shadows’ veils, at end of night,
sweet Moon removes her modest light
and softly, yet again, exhales -
at end of night, in shadows’ veils.

As she departs, her love’s released
to climb the stairway to the east.
They cannot meet to share their hearts.
Her love’s released as she departs.

She watches him while hid from view,
the way he kisses morning’s dew,
and sees gold rays spill from his rim.
While hid from view, she watches him.

Sad Moon, alone for centuries,
with awe has watched Sun leave, cerise.
while she, afar. . . how cold she’s grown! 
For centuries, sad moon alone.

She takes his place so he may rest.
And though forlorn, she’s always dressed
in lace, for Luna has great grace.
So he may rest, she takes his place.

For love of night, for love of day,
she can’t implore him that he sway
from course.  To be apart’s their plight.
For love of day, for love of night.

For Dr. Ram Mehta's Contest: Luna, the goddess of moon

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  1. Date: 2/16/2015 2:28:00 AM
    Just beautiful! And impressive form.

  1. Date: 11/7/2014 7:28:00 AM
    Just brilliant, you take my breath away.

  1. Date: 10/18/2014 12:33:00 PM
    Once again. . . .amazing. . . .the more I read of your work the more I feel I shouldn't be here. . .your command of words, thought and emotion is such a gift. . .

  1. Date: 12/20/2010 3:52:00 PM
    Congrats on your win, Andrea. Dan C

  1. Date: 12/20/2010 8:50:00 AM
    Congratulations Andrea on your beautiful Personification's honored place. Agape, Moses

  1. Date: 12/1/2010 12:48:00 PM
    Congratulations on your win..Sara

  1. Date: 11/25/2010 11:02:00 PM
    My heartfelt congratulations, Andrea on your win in the Soup Contest. You paint the sun and the moon with the beautiful colors of your creative mind...that I can't distinguish reality from fantasy. It takes a poetess such as you to make personification as real as possible. Your poetical talent is a powerful tool to express your magical beauty. Enjoy another achievement and be proud. Have a Blessed and happy Thanksgiving with your loved ones. :) God loves you. Lots of love and hugs, Andrew.

  1. Date: 11/25/2010 3:21:00 AM
    Andrea - Big vow on being verge of hat-trick. expressive meaningful swaps... luv it... Many congrats on winning coveted spot in contest..... Happy Thanksgiving.... Luv & Best wishes.....Hitendra Mehta

  1. Date: 11/24/2010 9:41:00 PM
    Your weave your words like flowing silk. the images you draw with your pen are beyond praise. thank you for sharing your splendid gift. congratulations. keep them coming. luv Margaret

  1. Date: 11/24/2010 8:10:00 PM
    Andrea...such lilting splendor! BRAVO!!! and CONGRATS!!! jimbo

  1. Date: 11/24/2010 5:40:00 PM
    Andrea.I just love reading your work.I'm enthralled by your creative mind.The images you use here are so beautiful and your portrayals of the Sun and Moon take on a real personnification,so that we can can feel and sympathise with them.This is wonderful but then I've come to expect nothing less from you.I think you're a truly gifted poet.Congratulations on your win.Love June

  1. Date: 11/24/2010 1:46:00 PM
    Super yay for you Andrea ^_^! I am not surprised to see that you are among the winners and yup 2 poems at that ;) I really love this one, I think it is really a timeless classic and I am so happy that you won something for it ^_^ -- email you later when I get home ok? :) - hugs to you!

  1. Date: 11/24/2010 1:41:00 PM
    Actually, Andrea, I like this poem better than number three, although they are both splendid. Hey! You be de bard. Congrats. Love, Dave

  1. Date: 11/24/2010 10:43:00 AM
    Congratulations once again Andrea! You are nailing these P.S. contests...hooray for you!! :)

  1. Date: 11/24/2010 7:50:00 AM
    Well done, Andrea! Big congratulations to you for this fine placement in the soup contest! Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 11/24/2010 5:07:00 AM
    My heartiest congratulations dear friend for this super win.

  1. Date: 11/23/2010 12:48:00 PM
    Dear Andrea, My warmest congratulations on your win in the PS Intl. Contest...Really you had two fantastic wins..3RD PLACE and 8TH Place! I hope you pursue that issue and have that decision reversed.. You deserve what you have labored for. I know you feel bad but justice will be done, I am sure. Much love, Audrey

  1. Date: 11/23/2010 10:31:00 AM
    Congratulations on your win Andrea in The PoetrySoup International Contest with your amazing poetry. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 11/23/2010 7:29:00 AM
    Congrats my dear...this is special! What a great way to start the holidays. BG

  1. Date: 11/23/2010 7:26:00 AM
    Congratulation, Andre with your win in the International contest, how wonderfully creative and deserving.. I want to try this form.. Love Constance