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Spaces-September I

empty slides in the park chatter fills the school bus Gael Turnbull(1928-2004,a Scottish doctor-poet created the imagist Spaces form in his collection Briefly (1967) a two line poem with a larger than usual space Turnbull called poems using his device ‘Spaces’, and noted of these ‘The visual “space” is,a pause or hesitation, even a temporary dislocation of attention’ .

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Date: 9/9/2009 3:06:00 AM
very much enjoy the total impact! Brian!...jim
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Date: 9/2/2009 3:22:00 AM
Brian,..one of the saddest parts of summers end,...8 hours of stressing out if mine Noah is fine out of mine clutch ! Great write my friend ! james
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Date: 9/1/2009 3:48:00 PM
Perfect! I read and see! Nice words, Brian. Regards, DAS-J
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Date: 9/1/2009 1:50:00 PM
education is important but yes we are creating robots of innocent little kids.......many empty slides,lack of fun for the little ones--well penned--love the title........--charma
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Date: 9/1/2009 11:24:00 AM
What a wonderful example of reading between the lines......perfectly said in this wonderful poem. ~ loved this! ~Carrie
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Date: 9/1/2009 7:43:00 AM
I was in an empty park yesterday... this is right on. as usual. BG
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Date: 9/1/2009 7:04:00 AM
Yes the parks are starting to get lonely..feet are busy readying for the new school year...lovely description.
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Date: 9/1/2009 6:29:00 AM
Nicely done, thank you for your comments and congrats to you on your many wins!
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Date: 9/1/2009 4:04:00 AM
This a an absolutely wonderful picture, any chance you could paint it too. Regards: Déirdre Ó Maidin
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Date: 9/1/2009 3:46:00 AM
Great poetic observation , Brian ....
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Date: 9/1/2009 2:36:00 AM
A balance of noise to no noise, nice work...Raul
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Date: 9/1/2009 2:21:00 AM
Our children here have to start to school now at the end of July or first of August. They get spaced holidays in the year because teachers claimed that they lost too much over a long summer break. I like the way you expressed the empty park and the bus. Sara
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