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Some ''sweet Day''

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So sad the dream of this sweet girl, With wings wide I soar and glide. End the deep, dark sad dream, Etched in my young mind! Time just stands still - Dark my soul, And the, Years. ______________________________ October 11, 2015 Poetry/Acrostic/Infinitian/Some "Sweet Day'' Copyright Protected, ID 15-716-348-0 All Rights Reserved. Written under Pseudonym. For the contest, Infinite Infiniatians, sponsor, Charlotte Jade Pettifoot Fourth Place

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Skat A

Date: 10/19/2015 11:26:00 PM

Broken, Congrats on your win. --SKAT :)

Edward Ebbs

Date: 10/17/2015 2:20:00 PM

Very Nice Broken, Congrats!

Balveen Cheema

Date: 10/17/2015 7:02:00 AM

Congrats on your win! Love, Balveen

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 10/17/2015 1:22:00 AM

Congrats on ur awesome winning write broken! U hv an amazing pen my dear!

Carrie Richards

Date: 10/16/2015 7:59:00 PM

Not only do you write beautiful poetry, but your illustrations are always exceptional !! Congratulations Constance!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2015 7:36:00 PM

yes, this is soulful as Charlotte said. Glad to see you with this win. Congrats, Constance.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 10/16/2015 4:55:00 PM

you're at home with deep and soulful; you've made good use of the single syllable words to create a coherent and poignant little poem...i would be tempted to have a line gap after 'still -' there's a natural break there with the two words and the hyphen - and remove the comma after 'the' so it reads simply 'and the/years' - just a suggestion - congrats on your win in my contest!

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/16/2015 4:54:00 PM

BW, congratulations on your win it was well deserved:-)Alexis

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/16/2015 4:44:00 PM

Beautifully haunting and sad, Broken. Congratulations on your nice win. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison

Date: 10/16/2015 4:33:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/12/2015 1:07:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by..I appreciate the honor of a 7 from you..I enjoyed reading this short work..It is very creative..If you wrote it for a contest it should do well..Sara

James Inman

Date: 10/12/2015 1:04:00 PM

Wonderful, BW! Sad and dark with a gentle remorseful undertone.

Cherl Dunn

Date: 10/12/2015 11:51:00 AM

Dear Broken Wings What a picture painted in words of excellence, love it my friend and photo pic goes along with it so perfectly also, great job, cheri

Anita Sharma

Date: 10/12/2015 11:22:00 AM

wow excellent write.liked much

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/11/2015 10:12:00 PM

BW, I really enjoyed this piece. You did good . It's not easy I know because I wrote one and had to remove from the contest. Good luck the contest:-)Alexis 7

Michael Tor

Date: 10/11/2015 9:50:00 PM

Good luck on this one Broken Wings for the contest.

Jan Allison

Date: 10/11/2015 4:55:00 PM

beautiful and yet haunting Broken wings - it is a challenging form good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx