Senryu- Snow- Stop

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is falling down- stop we went shopping in town- stop now snowed in- stop __________________ February 17, 2016 Poetry/Senryu/snow stop Copyright Protected, ID 16- 758-630-0 All Rights Reserved. Written under Pseudonym. For the contest, Instant Telegram Sponsor, Nathan D. Fifth Place

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Paul Callus

Date: 2/18/2016 3:40:00 PM

Lovely presentation; quite an unusual senryu! Good thing you finished shopping before getting snowed in:) ~ Regards // paul

Constance La France
Date: 2/18/2016 5:06:00 PM

Thanks for visiting, Paul, well it is for Nathans Telegram contest, so this is what I came up with ...

Timothy Hicks

Date: 2/17/2016 11:36:00 PM

Very unusual senryu. Either you're irritated with the snowfall or you're writing on one of those old telegram machines, in Morse code (lol). I like people that try and take the senryu and go somewhere different with it ... not often will you find much repetition in these minimalist poems!

Constance La France
Date: 2/18/2016 12:37:00 AM

Timothy, thanks for the visit and for nice comment !

Thomas Martin

Date: 2/17/2016 1:10:00 PM

Great use of telegram style! Admire it very much!

Constance La France
Date: 2/17/2016 2:50:00 PM

Thomas, thanks for the great and the compliment ~

Jill Spagnola

Date: 2/17/2016 10:38:00 AM

Constance, I really like your take on the senryu style :) Has the weather in your neck of the woods heeded your command, "stop"? I believe it was you who taught me a little about E.E. Cummings..if i am correct, I want to thank you again. I find the style so lovable:)...do you have a favorite I can take a look at (title)?..I hope the snow stops in time for a snow-day, and a romp in the beautiful white caps before the sun creates mud!!I miss NY

Constance La France
Date: 2/17/2016 10:48:00 AM

Jill, thanks for visiting my poem, I do love EE Cummings and use his style for free verses often, I would have to look at my list of poems to give you a title, we just had a huge snow storm here, as much snow fell in one day as we usually get in a month, that is a lot of snow, the city was at a stand still...