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Repulsive Slumber Down the basement, not a single color of envy, flat-lines, are standing still all around. The stillness is suffocating, everything coming my way. Different from, the morals, of my old organize ways. "Still Round The Corner There May Wait, A New Road Or A Secret Gate." ~~J.R.R. Tolkien~~ In certainty! Someone will help me dismantle this knowledge!! A movement so loud that bleeds, irritating metal in the open wide. Time standing still pushing, tossing the dice. Sleep walking in a slow pace, paralyzed and lost in a smoky haze. So blurred, my perception slips. The concept is so untouchable, Finding peace, I find the thrills, I conquered. Screaming! I wake up, Tangible evidence, released. Rough, pillows, invade me. I follow my guts, I finally found the right feelings... Exhaling one final breath, I freeze it! Avoiding the demons! Impossible, slumberous visions, entering the atmosphere , thickened, loud voices, ~ "WANT TO BE HEARD!" Sliding into my slumber, locked in one solid dream. My slumber, I lay so quietly, Voiceless, still I feel. So repulsive, still redeemable. My slumber, dry like black soap. Stillborn, yet still breathing! Stillborn, yet still moving! Reaching for the ceiling, and I try hard not to dream. An empty pyramid, winding up to a new start. Imperceptible pencils in my slumber, beneath me. Now I am in wonder, breaking my mind with this, from all the solidness. Only I can revolve around this light. Taking hard cold metal, stabbing it behind me. My repulsive slumber..... an ongoing punishment with dark fantasies. by;p.d. Dedicated to NIKKOS... poem *Elusive Dreams*

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Date: 12/8/2013 7:24:00 PM
Linda Such an "eerie" and deep write. You tell a story of sleeplessness and dreams that takes the reader into your weary mind and fatigue. Nice job Thanks for the sweet comment on my Luck Reversal poem. And the congrats on the win. Hugs
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Date: 5/9/2012 11:47:00 PM
Sketching the images thoughts, which emerge in sleep and get lost when you wake-up, is the most wonderful challenge for any creative writer and you have shown your creative power here also. 'My slumber, I lay so quietly,Voiceless, still I feel.So repulsive, still redeemable’ Beautiful work and congrats on your win my friend. Thanks for your thought provoking comments on my series Poem. Love and best wishes always...Ravindra...Poet D.
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Date: 3/2/2012 8:09:00 AM
It is always a pleasure to read your poetry P.D.... I want to thank you today for your kind words on my writing. Your words are appreciated more then you know. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/17/2012 2:18:00 AM
Intense and an awesome words. I liked it very much! And thank you for the support on my foray into poetry - hope all goes well!
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Date: 2/1/2012 5:48:00 AM
Dearest P.D. Linda, I have truly enjoyed reading your poetry you have posted here at PoetrySoup. You are a very special poet and I wish you the best in your life and with your poetry. 10 thumbs up to you. Love and best wishes always, Carol Ann Brown
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Date: 1/8/2012 11:27:00 PM
WoW! I had to go back and read a few of your joints! This one is the Dilly-YO! :) SMILE!
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Date: 11/29/2011 2:09:00 AM
darkness comes like some old ill, suffocating reverse of will, fight the good fight, right until, strength and redemption, inspires your quill... great poetry of lines...
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Date: 11/23/2011 6:39:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Tracie's "In a land called fantasy" contest P.D. It is not often I see you entered in a contest but when I do I know it will be an amazing write. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/22/2011 5:31:00 PM
Congrats PD my BFF on a super win for this grand entry luv... magnifico.. as always..thankxx for my place in your contest too... still nursing my hand ..now in steel plated cast to fuse nerves back and carpel tunnel..oh.. wow.. what next??? your BFF forever..luv..H.T. Day..
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Date: 11/22/2011 1:33:00 PM
This one was a thinker, but what is a poem if it doesn't call to you to read it again. Congrats
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Date: 11/16/2011 6:00:00 AM
that was the best,,i can relate,,,just making my rounds as i have time and wanted to say hi...
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Date: 11/16/2011 12:27:00 AM
wow! the power you hold here is soo freaking surreal that I can almost taste this dream's adrenalin. words and emotions entangled in a dance that can't be simply said yet also felt. A great poem PD!
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Date: 11/14/2011 6:19:00 PM
wowser a deep one I LIKE it..I think you have more than 1 verse there? and it sounds like energy vampires are after you while you sleep...you ARE not shielding youself..you are a huge bright flame in the astral space and they come to recharge..google shielding and grounding & physic attacks
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Date: 11/14/2011 12:03:00 PM
Powerful, dramatic and dark with this elusive dream. Excellent write on dreams. love phyl
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Date: 11/14/2011 5:59:00 AM
Hi PD. This one took me for a ride and to an unwanted place! It hurt my poor little brain following it...your description of the nightmare/slumber/fantasies could be orated by Rod Serling in the old Twilight zone show... Whew!
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Date: 11/13/2011 11:38:00 PM
This is extraordinary , I feel a lot of pain inflicted with the last stanza...your words are strong and piercing. Ouch...a dark fantasy. :) :) :) gwendolen
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Date: 11/13/2011 8:23:00 PM
A powerful read yet delivered with darkness, moving, creative...very different. I could feel your nightless sleep in this read. Captivating my friend! Thank you for sharing And May God Bless!
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Date: 11/13/2011 7:25:00 PM
another great pen
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Date: 11/13/2011 4:14:00 PM
Hey, sweet Irma. Thanks for your congrats today. I wish I had time to view the newest winner lists. Hope you got on one? You know me, always entering the contests (except for a few that stump me!) I'm going to get off soon and make enchiladas. I love that kind of stuff. Have a great day! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 11/13/2011 3:43:00 PM
p.d. Blackness crawls upon the pillow, sidestep it, dodging like a willow, play the game of 'me no never mind,' see it stumbling far behind, laugh in its face our Bilbo, like.... "me no never mind" Don
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Date: 11/13/2011 2:19:00 PM
Glad I stopped by to see what's new before getting dinner started for my 'troops'...always a pleasure to read my dear...hope this finds you well...luv shannon
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Date: 11/13/2011 1:44:00 PM
Well PD i've been flat lined black soaped Pillow invaded, and generally plunged into despair....(apart from this..! i found it) Quite a dark piece..bearing this in mind, it was intresting and convoluted... and i wish you all the best..!
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Date: 11/13/2011 1:39:00 PM
Complex like slumber itself, deeply woven. a good read, Linda.
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Date: 11/13/2011 10:50:00 AM
"Flat lines are standing still all around." This sets up your piece beautifully. I can relate. Hey! Wake up! You are crying. Love, daver
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Date: 11/13/2011 10:37:00 AM
Awesome write dear poet ! Have a wonderful week ! Much love, james
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