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The minute our eyes met it was love at first sight I knew you were the perfect one for me my parents tried to keep us apart but I simply couldn’t let you go My father tried to persuade me are you really sure he’s the one? It’s not too late to change your mind… I smiled my sweetest smile - Dad knew when he was beaten I skipped out of the toy shop .... nestling in my arms, my birthday teddy bear! Contest –Free Verse Love Poem Sponsored By Laura Loo 07~24~15

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Tom Arnone

Date: 9/24/2016 1:27:00 PM

Oh, that was a nice, twist, Jan. Wasn't expecting the Teddy Bear. Congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/30/2016 2:50:00 PM

I like to have a twist at the end of some of my poems:-) hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 9/23/2016 10:38:00 AM

so cute lovely Jan! congratulations on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 9/30/2016 2:49:00 PM

Thanks so much LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx

James Fraser

Date: 8/28/2015 4:13:00 PM

Simply shweet Jan, simply delightful to read ~ hugs//James xx

Jan Allison
Date: 8/28/2015 4:26:00 PM

I had fun with this one James i do get inspired by many of the contests:-) hugs jan xx

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/1/2015 10:34:00 PM

Jan, big congrats on your win! Teddy bears are adorable and so are sweet little girls. Mine is all grown up but still just as sweet! a7

Jan Allison
Date: 8/2/2015 4:42:00 AM

Thanks so much Robert for the lovely comment:-) hugs jan xx

Len Gasun

Date: 7/31/2015 9:19:00 PM

I love your sweet and cute poem my dear friend, Jan! Many warm congrats on your win! Hugs and cheers! Thank you so much for sharing! love lots, Leonora

Jan Allison
Date: 8/1/2015 3:51:00 AM

Thanks Leonora:-) Hugs Jan xx

Robert Stoner Jr

Date: 7/30/2015 4:14:00 PM

Oh Jan you toyed with me again you scamp, congratulations on your winning entry.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 4:19:00 PM

lol I have written a few twisted ones lately:-) hugs jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 7/30/2015 2:26:00 PM

Cute twist at the end of this one, Jan! Congrats on your win :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 2:39:00 PM

Thanks Laura:-) hugs Jan xx

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 7/30/2015 1:23:00 PM

Hi Jan, just swinging back to offer big congratulations on your win! Kind regards. Pandita

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 1:32:00 PM

Thanks Pandita:-) Hugs Jan xx

Lycia Harding

Date: 7/30/2015 12:37:00 PM

Haha! How adorable! Is that Little Jan starring in this story? Congrats on your win. xoxo

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 12:38:00 PM

Noooo although i was definitely a teddy girl i NEVER played with dolls! Hugs jan xx

Frederic Parker

Date: 7/30/2015 7:36:00 AM

congratulaions, teddy bears always win

Lycia Harding
Date: 7/30/2015 12:39:00 PM

Uh... Jan... I don't mean to pry but... are you a "Plushie"? heh heh

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 7:59:00 AM

They sure do Frederic:-) hugs Jan xx

D.W. Rodgers

Date: 7/30/2015 7:35:00 AM

Smiling had me hooked, and I bet you still have your Teddy. Congrats on your win!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 7:59:00 AM

I do lol :-) he's called lying on teddy because I used to lie on him:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/30/2015 7:32:00 AM

Soft and squishy, short and sweet, I know I read this before and loved it, and again the same. Nicely done ;)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 7:58:00 AM

Thanks Cas:-) hugs Jan xx

Skat A

Date: 7/30/2015 3:43:00 AM

jan, Congratulations on your SHWEET Free Verse Win. **SKAT**

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 3:54:00 AM

Thanks Skat:-) hugs jan x

Lee Carter

Date: 7/30/2015 12:36:00 AM

So cute and sweet! Congrats on your win! ~lee

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 1:51:00 AM

Thanks Lee:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/29/2015 11:51:00 PM

Wonderful write Jan! Glad that u listened to ur heart !Congrats on big win!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 1:51:00 AM

Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/29/2015 11:48:00 PM

Jan, it was that ending that got you a high placement with me. I adored my teddy bear too. Congrats, sweetie. This was cute.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 1:50:00 AM

Thanks Andrea - it was a shweet contest contest:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 7/28/2015 8:05:00 AM

Awe, this is a sweet twist you always have me thinking it is something else and surprise me at the end. Wonderful write and good luck a 10+++ hugs eve

Jan Allison
Date: 7/28/2015 9:09:00 AM

Aww thanks Eve especially for the ++ rating lol:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman

Date: 7/26/2015 7:04:00 AM

Very clever, luck Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2015 7:34:00 AM

Thanks James:-) hugs jan xx

Kelly Deschler

Date: 7/25/2015 2:03:00 PM

An adorable and very sweet poem, Jan. I just loved that unexpected ending! It made me smile too :) ...Good luck in Andrea's contest!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2015 2:05:00 PM

Thanks Kelly I hope Andrea likes it too:-) hugs Jan xx

Darlene Gifford

Date: 7/25/2015 5:54:00 AM

I loved your teddy bear ending, Jan. Great fun write. I withdrew my entry, you were right it was not sweet. ~~Darlene

Darlene Gifford
Date: 7/25/2015 6:58:00 AM

Anyway, Jan, I kept the poem and revised it. But just not for the contest. In case you want to read it. Hugs, Darlene

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2015 6:32:00 AM

Oh Darlene I hope you write another - I am just not a spider fan lol:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/25/2015 12:08:00 AM

Hi Jan, you are indeed a great writer. You know how to engage your audience ,take them on journey and their arrival is a unspected place. Excellent job! Good luck in the contest:-)Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2015 3:28:00 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment Alexis - I think I have come a long long way since I started writing last year! Hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 7/24/2015 10:53:00 PM

As always, you have that final surprise twist after gradual AND engaging development, Jan. A sweet write indeed. This is another winner! hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2015 3:27:00 AM

I hope Andrea likes it Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 7/24/2015 9:20:00 PM

Dear Jan, this is such a lovely piece with a delightful, shweet surprising ending! I enjoyed this clever write and expect to see it on the winners list! It's a 7! Warmest regards. Pandita

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2015 9:22:00 PM

Thanks Pandita - it is a lovely idea for the contest I have read some delightful poems:-) hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 7/24/2015 7:27:00 PM

G'day Jan... you sucked me right in again... and what a brilliant finale - good luck Jan - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2015 8:19:00 PM

I hope it's shweet enough for Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

David Brown

Date: 7/24/2015 7:09:00 PM

What a cute,endearing piece Jan. Very well done

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2015 8:19:00 PM

Thanks David:-) hugs Jan xx