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Senryu-13 Cardboard Dreams

broken homes and hearts stuffing cardboard dreams ex-friends scurry fast or broken homes and dreams stuff a cardboard box former friends scatter ** Inspired by Arthur Vaso's poem Cardboard Boxes** **http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/cardboard_boxes_841825

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Robert Pettit

Date: 10/29/2016 8:26:00 PM

Both of them are good reading.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/24/2016 5:47:00 PM

For me the second is the more senryu sounding one. I really like it!

Ilene Bauer

Date: 10/24/2016 4:58:00 PM

i also like both very much, tim...

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/24/2016 1:53:00 PM

Second one definitely my favourite...I do believe there are friends of ours that are distant..yet they still care for us and pray for our happiness..Then there are those friends who are always next to us except when we need them.Friends are only few.My best friend is my daughter..She needs me as much as I need her..and loves me just as much..Nice senryu.

Tim Smith
Date: 10/24/2016 2:04:00 PM

She definitely needs you and I'm sure you can see life better with her at your side. Yes true friends are hard to come by. When you find one cherish them, no matter how long the time away or distance they will be the ones standing beside you when you need someone.