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To the left curved the steep roadway. She veered right. Any other day she’d have hesitated. This time, though, she carried through. With the ocean in full view, she accelerated!

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Phyllis Babcock

Date: 6/12/2014 2:43:00 PM

Now you have me wondering did she hit the water or turn on time. I have never tried a tail rhyme. Nicely done. love phyl

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 4/13/2014 8:08:00 PM

Short, nice, and cool poem. Delight reading.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/30/2014 4:40:00 PM

ANDREA, Congratulations, on your win... Always & Forever...... Linda

Cynthia Buhain-Baello

Date: 3/25/2014 9:09:00 AM

Intriguing content, one wonders whether the character went straight into the water with the vehicle. Form is unique, flow smooth and action, fast. There's a certain urgency in the lines, and leaves food for thought. Cynthia

Joseph May

Date: 3/25/2014 8:19:00 AM

Congrats on your win Andrea

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/25/2014 12:41:00 AM

Very lovely poem. Congratulations on a fine win, andrea

D.W. Rodgers

Date: 3/24/2014 9:47:00 PM

And the moral is keep left. Congrats on your win.

Joyce Johnson

Date: 3/24/2014 7:05:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. So sad but perfectly executed. Love, Joyce

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 3/24/2014 6:18:00 PM

A chilling write..a bit different for you, but I like it..makes one think. congrats. BG

Robert Johnson

Date: 3/24/2014 2:56:00 PM

Congrats Andrea. Such a sad write.

Peter Dome

Date: 3/17/2014 7:58:00 PM

Well gotta be right some time. Great visuals. well done Pete. take care Pete.

Darren Watson

Date: 3/13/2014 7:47:00 PM

Saw a lady driver at a round a bout today , The road ahead totally clear , She waited and waited until eventually a car came from the other direction, The lady accelerated , The other driver was shouting , Oh dear , How unfortunate , or words to that effect . I thought of this poem then .

Jack Horne

Date: 3/11/2014 3:02:00 PM

Ohh, love this dark one - a sure winner : )

Judy Konos

Date: 3/9/2014 10:02:00 PM

clever and thrilling.

Richard D Seal

Date: 3/9/2014 8:24:00 PM

Not a happy poem Petal, I've had to ponder this comment for a while, sadly I've known a few that have taken their own lives, when you put yourself in their shoes looking at their temperaments and the issues that led them to end it, sometimes you can see their logic. Take care, Richard

Monterey Sirak

Date: 3/9/2014 5:35:00 AM

In a few lines you perfectly penned the split second choice between suicide or life. I wrote something once about the reality café, where life is the main course but suicide is the appetizer. I will try to find it.

Donna Jones

Date: 3/8/2014 10:10:00 PM

The split minute decision to make today different..we all get there sometimes...wondering if today will be that day perhaps...wonderful poem Andrea.

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 3/8/2014 5:17:00 PM

Good write Andrea. Is this about the woman that drove her car into the water with her Kids? I'm glad they were saved. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/8/2014 8:23:00 PM

No, Lucilla. and anyone else reading. I did not know about this woman until I was told about it yesterday!

Ilene Bauer

Date: 3/8/2014 3:51:00 PM

made me think of thelma and louise... excellent poem, andrea!

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 3/8/2014 2:35:00 PM

suicide it always a shame Andrea you have portrayed her well strong write kudos hugs

Frederic Parker

Date: 3/8/2014 10:01:00 AM

yes my friend your poem mirrored real life, a women in my state drove into the sea with her children ,two men pulled her and them out..she was trying to commit suicide

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/8/2014 3:03:00 PM

geez, I never even heard about it!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/8/2014 9:26:00 AM

Some of the poets here are getting my meaning. I don't know where it turned into something about children. there are no children in the car with her!!! It's just a fictionalized poem about suicide.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/8/2014 9:27:00 AM

WAs there some woman in the news recently who did this with children in her car???

Darren Watson

Date: 3/8/2014 8:57:00 AM

It is a very strong short story based on truth by the look of the comments , Chilling is the word I would use to describe what I am reading but it is expertly done.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/8/2014 8:39:00 AM

Well don't know if this is about the recent murder of the children or not..If so, that was a sad event in our country..Thanks for the visits to my page..Sara

Tim Smith

Date: 3/8/2014 8:03:00 AM

This was a sad story. I hope every turns out well for the children....Tim