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This morning I went shopping Tripped over, started hopping My milk bottle it went slopping The store cleaner began mopping I hobbled out of the store Got caught in the sliding door Lost my wallet and now I’m poor I really can’t take anymore Then I fell on to my knees Dropped my bag and my car keys Gave out a massive sneeze And then began to wheeze I found my red sports car The door it was ajar They’d stolen my Snickers bar It really was quite bizarre I jumped behind the wheel I began to shout and squeal Why my Snickers did they steal - It really was quite surreal My shopping trip was tough I was feeling pretty rough I drove off in a huff – I’d really had enough Had an ache in my poor old head Drove home and went to bed Shopping trip left me half dead … Will opt for home delivery instead! I thought I’d pen a rhyme With words that are sublime I hope this one is fine And in the list will shine 05~28~15 Contest:- Rhyme Time Sponsor:- Pendleton Arkwright

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Shonima Burman

Date: 6/25/2015 9:09:00 AM

Enjoyed every bit of it Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:23:00 PM

thanks so much for your support:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 6/5/2015 6:11:00 PM

This one is fine, I have had a few like that but I actually fall on my knees. a 7 hugs eve

Jan Allison
Date: 6/5/2015 6:14:00 PM

oh dear Eve - thankfully mine is purely a fiction write for the contest:-) Hugs janxx

Old Buck

Date: 6/4/2015 1:32:00 PM

Jan: I can certainly understand your mourning the lose of a Snickers Bar. It's interesting how a well guided rhyme can take an "ordinary" day and make it sound so "magical". Well done. oldbuck

Jan Allison
Date: 6/4/2015 1:35:00 PM

I never know what will come out of my pen Old buck - i just have to go with the flow of my muse - this is total fiction but I guess it could happen lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Thomas Martin

Date: 6/1/2015 3:32:00 PM

Really I loved this one, Jan!! Your rhyming lines are so graceful (know say that all the time about your verse)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/1/2015 3:36:00 PM

Thanks Thomas I do appreciate your support:-) I just write and hope others like my musings:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 5/31/2015 2:55:00 PM

Excellent pen Jan! This is so funny and so much fun was for me to read it, it sure made me smile a lot,my dear friend. I truly enjoyed it! You're so funny with this one. Lol...A 7!Thanks a lot for visiting my page and all.Very much I appreciate it.Wishing you a very lovely week!In his light!God bless you! Hugs!:) D.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/31/2015 3:16:00 PM

Glad it made you smile Dorian:-) hugs Jan xx

Lanette Kissel

Date: 5/31/2015 2:39:00 PM

Jan, I love this poem. Really funny and just plain fun. Good work. Lanette Kissel

Jan Allison
Date: 5/31/2015 3:16:00 PM

Thanks Lanette:-) hugs Jan xx

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 5/30/2015 7:26:00 PM

Jan, this is hilarious!! It was so much fun to read, you have an awesome sense of humor. Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 5/31/2015 3:11:00 AM

Thanks Cecilia I have always tried to write with humour since day one - this is just a silly rhyme penned for the contest not based on real life at all lol - my imagination goes into overdrive and this is the result lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet

Date: 5/30/2015 10:39:00 AM

Your words are well chosen and convey their meaning well allowing for a smooth flow of thoughts from line to line in perfect rhyme. Emile.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2015 12:04:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by Emile:-) Hugs Jan xx

Darlene Gifford

Date: 5/30/2015 6:01:00 AM

Thanks for my morning laugh, Jan. A sure winner and a 7. Darlene

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2015 7:02:00 AM

Glad I made you smile:-) Hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/29/2015 7:27:00 PM

Its hard to write dark depressing poetry with you around!!!!!!!!!! ( and thats a good thing )

Jan Allison
Date: 5/29/2015 7:30:00 PM

aww thank you my friend:-) I do have bad days too but I have to go with my muse when it comes to writing and thankfully she is usually in a playful mood:-) Hugs jan xx

James Fraser

Date: 5/29/2015 6:47:00 PM

When it comes to declaring the winners. I'll run through the crowd and give you a Fireman's lift and place you on the winners podium. This is lovely quirky Jan, hugs, James xxx

Jan Allison
Date: 5/29/2015 7:17:00 PM

I hope Pendleton likes it - there were no rules for the contest simply rhyme time so I went with the flow of my pen... I do worry about myself some times lol:-) Hugs jan x

Edwin Hofert

Date: 5/29/2015 1:59:00 PM

I think the room is spinning! Oh wait! that's just me grinning. :) A 7 From one who knows the pain of having candy come up missing lol. Awesome poem Jan. And Good luck! <3

Jan Allison
Date: 5/29/2015 2:01:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by Edwin always a pleasure to see you:-) Hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/29/2015 8:56:00 AM

Ha ha, the fun never ceases with you my dear.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/29/2015 10:20:00 AM

Pure fiction for the contest Richard - it only took about 10 mins to write:-) Hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/29/2015 3:39:00 AM

ohh, what a grueling time!.. hope this didn't include a BHD, lol.. very fine write, jan.. hugggs

Jan Allison
Date: 5/29/2015 7:18:00 AM

Just a fictitious write for the contest - there were no rules so I just went with the flow of my pen and hope Pendleton likes it:-) Hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 5/28/2015 11:26:00 PM

Crikey Jan... did you walk under a ladder or did a black cat cross your path. I never realized shopping could be so interesting - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 5/29/2015 1:09:00 AM

Pure fiction:-) Hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/28/2015 11:26:00 PM

Hi Jan, This poem is hilarious. I have a feeling that its going to shine! Good luck in the contest:) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 5/29/2015 1:10:00 AM

There were no actual details for the contest just said rhyme time - so I went with the flow of my pen:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandip Goswami

Date: 5/28/2015 10:28:00 PM

Hi JAN (In Bengali and Hindi languages, JAN means SOUL). Yes, this one is fine. Thank you very much dear friend.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/29/2015 1:09:00 AM

Oh that is so lovely thank you Sandip:-) Hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 5/28/2015 5:02:00 PM

ha! very well done, jan! good luck in the contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 5/29/2015 1:08:00 AM

Thanks Ilene:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/28/2015 3:41:00 PM

aha, begging for a win. It does not often work for me with many judges, but I think you stand a GREAT chance, Jan. This was really great fun and some great monorhymes!! Soupmail.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/28/2015 3:42:00 PM

The last stanza was actually my starting point - thought I would keep it in:-) Hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 5/28/2015 2:13:00 PM

You definitely shine here....but grab some auto wax and give that red car a spiff...just to add to the glamour..REALLY GREAT ...JAN...LOVED IT..

Jan Allison
Date: 5/28/2015 2:23:00 PM

LOl Thanks Judy - just hope Pendleton likes it :-) Hugs Jan xx

Skat A

Date: 5/28/2015 1:33:00 PM

good luck in contest

Jan Allison
Date: 5/28/2015 1:35:00 PM

Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 5/28/2015 12:39:00 PM

This is a funny one, Jan! It made me smile to read it :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/28/2015 1:08:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by Laura:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sneha Rv

Date: 5/28/2015 12:28:00 PM

HEHE!! This was a great idea!! All the best!! :D :D

Jan Allison
Date: 5/28/2015 1:08:00 PM

Thanks Sneha just for fun for the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 5/28/2015 12:18:00 PM

Great poem for the contest, Jan! Awesome rhymes! Had me laughing! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 5/28/2015 1:07:00 PM

Just a fun write Sandra there were no rules for the contest so I just came up with a rhyme:-) Hugs Jan xx

Mark Ackerson

Date: 5/28/2015 11:11:00 AM

Funny, Jan... don't want to go shopping with YOU

Jan Allison
Date: 5/28/2015 11:13:00 AM

Pure fiction lol just decided on a fun rhyme - in all honesty apart from shopping for food which is essential I don't enjoy really enjoy shopping especially clothes shopping:-( Hugs jan xx