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Red Sun

Patriots' Heaven the red sun glows through white streaks of clouds on a blue canvas - a happy fourth of July written on dawn’s sky Written 6/25/13 for Russell Sivey's Red sun poetry contest

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Jeremy Martin

Date: 8/29/2013 2:17:00 AM

What a lovely palette of colors and soft feelings you've created here, Andrea :)

Kash Poet

Date: 7/26/2013 8:02:00 AM

I came here to see what went wrong with this poem.Beautiful Dodoitsu!

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 7/24/2013 8:44:00 PM

Nice one on the red sun. I looked at the contest but nothing was coming to my mind at the time.love phyl

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 6/30/2013 5:36:00 AM

nicely done my lady. Good luck in the contest. AO

Joe Maverick

Date: 6/29/2013 3:01:00 PM

Really liked the emotive scene/words here Andrea; I wish you a very happy 4th of july i suppose I will just be doing boring stuff; well apart from reading on 'soup' take care Joe..)

Jack Horne

Date: 6/29/2013 2:55:00 PM

love this, my friend - a sure winner herre

Victoria Anderson-Throop

Date: 6/28/2013 7:49:00 PM

nice timing....of course, you are always on key...thanks for the comment..am at the library, so just a short hello...all is ok

Donna Jones

Date: 6/28/2013 5:31:00 PM

Oh this is awesome Andrea.....

Robert Pettit

Date: 6/28/2013 9:23:00 AM

How imaginative and patriotic! Just in time for the Fourth of July.

Heather Ober

Date: 6/28/2013 7:11:00 AM

Gorgeous, and so fitting for this time of year! Canada Day is July 1st, so we have a patriotic long weekend starting tonight :)

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 6/28/2013 7:05:00 AM

He will like this Andie. Light & Love

John Posey

Date: 6/28/2013 4:13:00 AM

Nice going, darlin'. I think you penned a winner.... Love ya.... Jake

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/28/2013 12:17:00 AM

lovely Andrea, so visual

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/27/2013 11:00:00 PM

This is clever utilizing red whie and blue. Should strike a chord with the judge. Well done Andrea!

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 6/27/2013 7:13:00 PM

Andrea your poem evokes mood of celebration. Nicely done. Warm Smiles, Connie

Richard D Seal

Date: 6/27/2013 6:49:00 PM

I can almost touch that flag fluttering away there, which reminds me, I'm off to England soon for a short while, I'd best scedadle, I don't need any more scrapes in those reinactments lol. I'll be gone before the 4th but I'll be thinking of y'all. Take care, Richard

Christine Phillips

Date: 6/27/2013 6:14:00 PM

What is "dawn’s sky"? the fire works, the mind? please tell what you are thinking, it has many meanings.

Wilma Neels

Date: 6/27/2013 1:48:00 PM

Love the idea you used for your entry Andrea, almost celebration time for you with the 4th of July being around the corner ;) all the best for the contest. Love Wilma

Daver Austin

Date: 6/27/2013 10:18:00 AM

Few of the folks I've come in contact with know anything about the 30s music - those wonderful old musicals - which makes me feel very old and, in a sad way, misunderstood. How does an old fart like me get up-do-date? Love, daver

Bl Devnath

Date: 6/27/2013 10:05:00 AM

Wonderful theme you have chosen and worded the excellent beauty. Good luck in the contest. I have changed my "I still owe him" just now. Please read and tell me. Loved always, bl

Bl Devnath
Date: 6/27/2013 10:07:00 AM

Sorry, not Red Sun. I still owe him

Isaiah Zerbst

Date: 6/26/2013 8:46:00 PM

Very patriotic poem. I can't help but imagine lines of soldiers marching beneath this gigantic banner in the sky, hearts swelling with desire to serve their country at any cost. So much here that is unwritten! Nice work!

Robert Johnson

Date: 6/26/2013 5:00:00 PM

Soup mail Question.

Robert Johnson

Date: 6/26/2013 4:19:00 PM

May this nations spirit once again be as beautiful as this poem. Wishing you a wonderful 4th.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 6/26/2013 2:43:00 PM

Interesting! Light & Love

Daver Austin

Date: 6/26/2013 9:50:00 AM

Just right for adding a splash of vivid c0olor for the 4th. Jeanette McDonald and Nelson Eddy sang in all the 30s musicals - Blossom Time, The Desert Song, May Time,Rose Marie, Bittersweet and on and on. Few of the young men and women know much about them, but they were loaded with some of the finest music ever written. Love, daver