Rain

( Rain ) I was standing by the window, when it started to rain. I could see it coming down. I remember being sad. That's the way I always felt, everytime it rained. I remember sometime back when I once walked in the rain. I was feeling very sad and I started to cry. My tears mixed in with the rain drops. The people that passed by, looked at me and saw me, but could not tell I was crying. Since then I wait until it rains, than I go out and cry in the rain. As I stand here now and wartch the rain through the window, I can feel the tear drops fall - from my soul into my heart... Copyright Written by Lucilla M. Carrillo Comments: Just another sad rainny day.

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/21/2013 12:28:00 AM

I really, really liked that pause at the end. It felt like it was subtly building up to that point and then... wow. You're different than other poets I've read on the Soup. You use the simplest of words and statements, but yet it moves me because I can tell that you're very honest and true to yourself when you write... it oozes from your words.

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 2/26/2013 1:43:00 AM

Beautiful piece that captured me to the very end. Impressive work! Thanks for posting and sharing. :) Always, Laura

Eileen Manassian

Date: 2/18/2013 3:19:00 AM

Wow! What a meaningful and deep piece of writing! I loved it! I love the rain, by the way. Always have! My mother did too! Since she's been gone, it keeps me connected somehow. Thanks for your visit and your lovely comments on my poem! Hope the inner rain doesn't last long.

David Williams

Date: 2/15/2013 4:54:00 AM

Lucilla the sun is shining here today in UK, first signs of Spring...David

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 2/14/2013 3:26:00 PM

This is so sad, I don't think I have ever done that, I am happy NOT to cry as often as I did in my youth. It hurts to cry! Thanks so much for reading my work. Light & Love

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 2/14/2013 10:30:00 AM

Dear Lucilla, that is fine to cry when it rains but you should also go out and laugh when it's sunny that way the balance is restored! Have a nice V Day! Beautiful writing, very moving and human!

Len Gasun

Date: 2/14/2013 8:28:00 AM

A very lovely heartfelt poem my dear friend! Sometimes, rain can ease our pains. Congrats for a great write my dear Lucilla! I hope you're doing well especially this very special day! Well, I am stopping by also to greet you and your love ones a very Happy Valentines Day! I wish you all the best of love this Heart's Day and always! love and big hugs, Leonora

Harry Horsman

Date: 2/14/2013 5:48:00 AM

yes one can see the reasons this was published,, Lucilla, it is beautiful poetry..

Russell Sivey

Date: 2/13/2013 3:29:00 PM

This is quite the teary eyed write my friend! I am pained whenever I read a sad poem, this is a great one though Lucilla! What a lovely rain inspired piece, Awesome Work!!

Lucilla Carrillo
Date: 2/13/2013 9:02:00 PM

This was my very first poem. It was published in a book.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/13/2013 11:49:00 AM

- Touching written Lucilla. - Next time it rains, go out to dance in the rain. -Meet the rain as a gift to you and everything that grows. - Have a lovely day. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 2/13/2013 11:51:00 AM

Luck in contest, Lucilla !!! <3

Daver Austin

Date: 2/13/2013 8:52:00 AM

I like this one, Lucilla, it touches something deep which a poem is supposed to do, so I believe. Just one thing - edit your stuff for typos. YOu will get a larger audience. LOve, daver