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Picture Perfect: At Sea

Thunder rumbled overhead and lightning split the grey sky,
As the little boat rocked with the rolling waves;
Salt water and icy rain soaked him,
Washing the puke stains from his clinging clothes.
As he prayed, the bitter taste of vomit and a strange stench,
Like rotting flesh and fish, made him retch again. 
Then, his heart almost stopped as he spotted the sea serpent, 
when it reared up, its neck as tall as a lighthouse 
and its gaping mouth like a vast cavern full of stalactites and stalagmites.
Face-to-face with the prehistoric-looking predator, 
He wondered who would believe he’d seen such a creature…

And then he screamed in agony as jagged teeth ripped at his flesh…

For Andrea’s Picture Perfect contest

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  1. Date: 8/29/2013 5:59:00 PM
    Awesome jack ;} reminds me of " Life of PI,,, check it out on u tube ;} I've watched it two 1/2 times now, 3rd time I got up to wash dishes, cook dinner ;} I love your story up there ;} Congrats on your win too ;}

  1. Date: 8/25/2013 3:07:00 AM
    Wow Jack, what a story!...I was totally mesmerized...Well deserved win! - Tim

  1. Date: 8/24/2013 5:49:00 PM
    Congratulations on your outstanding win

  1. Date: 8/22/2013 9:05:00 PM
    CONGRATULATIONS!!! JACK, Picture awesome Perfect. LOVE ~SKAT~

  1. Date: 8/22/2013 8:02:00 PM
    Hello Jack, talk about a picture perfect poem. I love it.. congrats in Andrea's contest...luv...LINDA

  1. Date: 8/22/2013 3:03:00 PM
    OMG, Jack. You wrote me one that was not short!!! So I did not have a clue this was yours. It is so interesting to me that no matter what you write, it always somehow manages to get onto my winners' list. A well deserved win in my contest. Your poem was well crafted and very descriptive. Congratulations.

  1. Date: 8/22/2013 2:47:00 PM
    Lovely and wonderful piece....Very captivating,my dear friend..Congrats on your superb win in this contest...

  1. Date: 8/22/2013 12:09:00 PM
    My oh my, is this ever good! Congratulations.

  1. Date: 8/22/2013 11:31:00 AM
    Congrats on your great win..Sara

  1. Date: 8/22/2013 7:37:00 AM
    Oh my goodness Jack, lovely piece. Your imagery is just perfect on this one. Wishing you all the best for the contest :) lfde Wilma

  1. Date: 8/21/2013 10:12:00 PM
    Awesome!! Definitely should be an excerpt from a future novel, Jack! A winner for sure, not a doubt!! xx Annalise

  1. Date: 8/20/2013 11:32:00 AM
    Being a sailor, I feel the suspenseful intesity in this piece. You csn check out my PICTURE PERFECT penned for thesame competition. Good luck, love, always...Michael.

  1. Date: 8/19/2013 1:47:00 PM
    Loved the suspense in this story but not the thought of vomit LOL . Nice one Jack BUT did he get away??? love phyl

  1. Date: 8/17/2013 8:05:00 AM
    Well at least you lived to tell the story..LOL..Enjoyed reading this one today..I am glad that I chose it to read..Thanks for the visits..Sara

  1. Date: 8/16/2013 9:13:00 PM
    This is a glorious write my friend, I just love how your build up the poem on and on until the climax at the end with a very large heightened last line! I really enjoyed reading this delightful poem this evening! What a brilliant piece, Great Work!!

  1. Date: 8/16/2013 8:20:00 PM
    ,,,and you painted quite the picture...good luck in the contest! :)

  1. Date: 8/16/2013 4:42:00 PM
    Soup mail, again, Constance

  1. Date: 8/16/2013 4:01:00 PM
    Soup Mail sent, Constancel

  1. Date: 8/16/2013 3:53:00 PM
    Jack, wow, now this is a picture perfect for sure, wonderful, best of luck with this super entry for the contest, I have to do good to beat this one! Constance

  1. Date: 8/16/2013 3:11:00 PM
    jack!... a racy, descriptive piece that makes the senses reel.. what a powerful story!..:) huggs