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Penny-posing Loafer

You penny-posing loafer
You’re worn, through and through
Like us, puh-lease say we’re over 
Before I fly-salt your food

You’re worn, through and through
Like the new burn-holes in your pants?
Before I fly-salt your food,
Why not leave as I passively ask?

Like the new burn-holes in your pants,
The gap between us is HUGE
Why not leave as I passively ask?
Walk out in your tack-filled shoes

The gap between us is HUGE
Like us? Puh-lease, say we’re over 
Walk out in your tack-filled shoes
You penny-posing loafer

(fly-salt: to sprinkle flies like salt onto food; puh-lease: please ennunciated)
For Rhonda & Cyndi's Pantoum Contest

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  1. Date: 4/22/2013 7:37:00 PM
    boo....did i scare you...Pd

  1. Date: 9/27/2012 8:33:00 PM
    Hi Susan, oh I'm so sorry for taking so long to get to this page! Awesome poem in every way, and YES you are right, pantoums are a challenge! Liked the style and oomph of this one. Thanks for the entry and congrats on the win. Hugs, Cyndi

  1. Date: 9/26/2012 9:28:00 AM
    haha! cool one!congratulations :)

  1. Date: 9/26/2012 5:21:00 AM
    A belated congratulations on your win in Rhonda and Cyndi's "Penny Pantoums" contest Susan. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 9/25/2012 11:16:00 PM
    Congrats on your win with this wonderful Pantoum!

  1. Date: 9/25/2012 3:18:00 PM
    Congrats on your winning work..Sara

  1. Date: 9/25/2012 11:20:00 AM
    Very GOOD Pantoum here Susan!Congratulations on your win!

  1. Date: 9/25/2012 9:48:00 AM

  1. Date: 9/25/2012 8:48:00 AM
    Soo beautiful! I love it!! My hearty congratulations on your win my dear Susan!!! hugs:) Leonora

  1. Date: 9/25/2012 6:13:00 AM
    congrats on a great win Susan

  1. Date: 9/25/2012 1:06:00 AM
    Congratulations well done and a well deserved win but please tell me what is "fly -salt"? xx

  1. Date: 9/17/2012 4:08:00 PM
    Wow Susan...that's telling em! Very nice. Best wishes for the contest. Thanks for comments and visiting and for the placement in your contest. One love. Joy Wells

  1. Date: 9/17/2012 1:43:00 PM
    back for anther read, susan... thanks too for the honor of being on your list in the walls contest.. you inspired me so!..:) huggs!

  1. Date: 9/15/2012 4:57:00 PM
    Good luck in Rhonda and Cyndi's contest..Winner for sure..Interesting topic that you used..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

  1. Date: 9/15/2012 2:57:00 PM
    love this strong and witty write, Susan. I had to chuckle about fly-salt (haven't heard of that before,lol)

  1. Date: 9/14/2012 10:11:00 AM
    excellent entry into the contest. good luck

  1. Date: 9/14/2012 7:46:00 AM
    A very well done pantoum Susan...loved the style which you use your words with. Good luck, really enjoyed the read.

  1. Date: 9/12/2012 2:02:00 PM
    a crisp take on the theme, susan... enjoyed the light banter and word choices!... winning wishes and huggs!..:)

  1. Date: 9/12/2012 9:50:00 AM
    nice pantoum Susan ....enjoyed...winning wishes in the

  1. Date: 9/11/2012 9:47:00 PM
    It's nice to have time down here now but sad for Joe driving so long again on the road. I hope to be done here soon. I'm watching the Voice. HOw about you?