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Peace - (Triple Tanka)

I'd like to believe Peace is a natural state That war is foreign But I see war after war And brother slaying brother Old sacrifice young Our youth gone before their day Then I want to cry For thought that they gain nothing Are lost through their innocence What a wonder youth How pliable and pristine They want but to shine While all the burnt-out old men Pull the strings from their armchairs

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Date: 11/20/2010 7:00:00 PM

Another creative poem from you to read today. Congratulations on having this one featured. Keep on writing my friend. Wishing you ongoing success. Karen

Shabnam Kaur

Date: 11/16/2010 5:42:00 AM

This poem is really good!

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 11/15/2010 10:58:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week Daver. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 11/14/2010 2:33:00 PM

Congrats Dave on your featured poem this week on the Soup.. a special piece to share with us all with luv this happy Sunday ..luv..

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/9/2010 10:13:00 AM

Hey, why don't you get some new poems up for heaven sake!!! hahahaha (I keep forgetting where i left off here on this back page!)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/9/2010 10:12:00 AM

those last two lines, so awesome and powerful, DAver. And the whole poem is just great. Yes, I have been told sonnets are my forte. Except I was born in a century that simply does not care about them, Daver. Glad you enjoyed Keeper of the Beast, you little Beastie you. LUv, andrea

James Foulk

Date: 8/9/2008 11:01:00 AM

In the Bible it says there will always be war and rumors of war, so there will never be peace until Jesus sets up His Kingdom, but we do have to try and bring peace in any way we can. this was a great messge and i enjoyed it. thank you for reading Frog Kissing Booth and for your comment

Date: 8/5/2008 12:55:00 PM

What a thought provoking poem. Love the last two lines--powerful way to end your thoughts. Thank you for sharing your talent with us and for your kind comments on my poem. Keep on writing! Have a nice day! Karen

Heidie Buys

Date: 8/3/2008 1:03:00 PM

Reminds me of the song:"Where have all the flowers gone?" This is very well written and very sad and mournful. I really enjoyed reading this fine poem. Regards Heidie

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 8/3/2008 5:39:00 AM

Daver, this is brilliant. How did I miss this masterpiece??? LOVE the last 2 lines, how bright youth burns, and how bright the light at the end...too bad it get's lost by some...I just love this so much - love Kristin

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 8/2/2008 11:02:00 AM

Fighting for peace is an oxymoron, just like "holy" war. Good write. I was talking about Obama's speech when he stated "We are no longer a Christian Nation" and Michelle Obama's anti-white thesis written while she attended Princeton University (on a full, we paid for it, scholarship). If those type of racist views are allowed we will be no better off than we were in the pre-civil rights days. It's ashame we can't look at a neighbor and just see a neighbor, neither black no white. Vince

Fathima Dawood

Date: 7/31/2008 2:12:00 AM

Absolutely, I cannot believ what our world has ecome, the violence, the bloodshed, and no one blinks an eyelid.It is so sad, well done. Peace Fathima

Sharon Winter

Date: 7/30/2008 2:18:00 PM

I think your next to last line was way too kind. Your words are full of truth. It infuriates me and breaks my heart at the same time. I am too emotional on this subject. A wonderful write. Thanks Daver for always answering my questions in your comments. You are an awesome poet and a most interesting person to know. Love, Shar

P Sheart

Date: 7/30/2008 1:09:00 PM

Daver, Oh so true. You know I believe war to be a disease. A spiritual cancer that turns love into hate. So many suffer needlessly. Eons it will take before innocense is protected. May our troops come home in Godspeed. A hard write, needs to be said. Take care hun, blessings to you and your family. Love Light Truth Patricia