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Passion

Stars shining brightly in the night sky. Sweaty palms and butterflies. Deep in silent thoughts, while our lips meet. So close in touch I can feel his heartbeat. Slowly pulling me in with every breath we take. Holding me in his arms as I begin to shake. Gently laying me down in the summers grass. Taking our time, making this moment last. Our bodies intertwined like the twisting of a rope, his hands firmly grasping my hair. Looking into each others eyes as we passionately make love in the warm night air.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 4/30/2014 9:27:00 PM
LISA, this is a sweet win:) Congratulations, <3 always ~SKAT~ <3
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Date: 4/26/2014 1:26:00 AM
Lisa, stopping by a second and third time, this time to congratulate you awesome win:) Thank you so much for bearing out my contest. If you like, -stop by my latest blog "LOVE" Enjoy the tiny tribute to all the winning poems. Here's the link, just in case you're one of the new poets. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poems_poets/poem_detail.aspx?ID=556582 ***Always & Forever*** -LINDA
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Date: 11/3/2013 5:23:00 AM
Steamy Erotic Tantalizing Loved it. Bravo
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Date: 11/1/2013 9:18:00 PM
Ah, here we see passion overcoming and overwhelming! Keep on writing Lisa! MC
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Date: 10/23/2013 7:19:00 AM
- Lisa, I love this one !!! - Beautiful poem ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/16/2013 2:38:00 AM
Hum§ Bodies, hands, hair...eyes! wOOw...what a romance! I like it, a real delight to the sense of imagination <3 Have a beautiful day, Rita SR.
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Date: 10/13/2013 6:25:00 PM
loved it-wouldn't change a thing
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Date: 10/12/2013 4:55:00 PM
Hi Lisa, Lovely poesia romantica.. Ken
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Date: 10/12/2013 9:53:00 AM
Very passionate piece. My only suggestion to make this piece flow better would be to rework the last 4 lines. I would add more length and detail (imagery or emotion) to lines 15 and 16, so it evens out the beat and rhythm. Overall, good poem that I enjoyed; kudos :)
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Lisa Mccall
Date: 10/12/2013 12:42:00 PM
Ok I reworked it. ty for ur feedback.

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