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Oh Dear - Dad's Beer

Beer dad did pour; placed on floor but dad sure full glass Sis gulped dad’s beer, Felt so *****… sick Oh dear, dad’s sad! Drank dad’s home brew Age just two, poor Dad knew - too late! A true poem about my sister and dad who were visiting his friend Alexis. Dad poured a glass of home brew and put it on the floor - next thing he discovered was my sister had picked it up and drank it all! She was pretty sick and mum was very cross! Sponsor: Marugu Mo Contest: Than-Bauk on Human Folly 02~16~16

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Date: 3/16/2016 7:37:00 AM
Than-Bauk written in style..Congrats on your winner..Sara
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Jan Allison
Date: 3/17/2016 3:40:00 PM
Many thanks Sara:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/15/2016 5:45:00 PM
Jan, Congrats on your win in "Marugu MO's contest." Wuv ~LINDA~
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Date: 3/17/2016 3:40:00 PM
Many thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/13/2016 7:04:00 PM
BIG congrats to you here, Jan!
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Date: 3/11/2016 12:44:00 PM
Hmm... nicely done, Jan. Hugs, Bobby
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Date: 3/11/2016 3:24:00 PM
Thanks Bobby:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/11/2016 11:54:00 AM
Hi Jan, back to smile with you again.
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Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2016 3:24:00 PM
Thanks for your continued support James:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/11/2016 7:44:00 AM
Hi Jan, i do like your story in this one. I found it hard on this one, it isn't the most easy form but i guess that is what makes it interesting. I really liked your work. A seven from me. Congratulations on your placement in the contest....MIKE.
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Date: 3/11/2016 3:24:00 PM
Thanks Mike I too found it a really challenging form:-)Hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/22/2016 9:13:00 PM
Cute!! Like the poem! Good luck in the contest!
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Date: 2/24/2016 2:03:00 PM
Many thanks Eve - mum still talks about it to this day lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/21/2016 4:40:00 PM
You obviously know your types of poetry well Jan. and can instill humour into each and every one. Well done.
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Date: 2/22/2016 12:17:00 PM
I've never heard of let alone tried this form before Jean and I did find it a big challenge. I just hope the sponsor likes my poem:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 2/21/2016 8:31:00 AM
BTW, I really miss you and think about you all the time. Lots of love, Armand.
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Jan Allison
Date: 2/21/2016 10:21:00 AM
Miss you too my friend its so lovely to see you back commenting:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/21/2016 8:29:00 AM
Great story, I know this form and you did an excellent job. A Fav. Cheers!
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Date: 2/21/2016 10:22:00 AM
I found it a real challenge - I do love the contests for bringing new forms to us.. I hope the sponsor likes my poem:-) love and hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/20/2016 7:13:00 PM
hmmmm never heard of this interesting form, but as usual you handle itx Exquisitely! Great poem!!
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Date: 2/21/2016 10:21:00 AM
I struggled with the form Thomas it is a real challenge to get a story told in so few words and get the rhyme scheme correct:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/20/2016 2:29:00 PM
Jan, was dad sad for your sister or the loss of his beer, haha?
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Date: 2/21/2016 10:20:00 AM
I think he knew the grief mum would give him lol:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 2/19/2016 11:41:00 PM
Id be cross too someone drank my beer!!!! :) Loved this!
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Date: 2/20/2016 10:22:00 AM
LOL:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 2/18/2016 4:12:00 PM
I have read a couple of these entries, Jan, but I still have to see how this form works. Apart from that, your entry has got enough serious-humour to give it a high rating. hugs ~ paul
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Date: 2/18/2016 4:19:00 PM
I don't know if I've got it correct Paul it is a very complex short form and was a real challenge to write - that is what I love about these contests:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/18/2016 2:47:00 AM
Nice and frothy...so well done!
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Date: 2/18/2016 9:23:00 AM
lol Thanks David:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/17/2016 11:13:00 PM
Jan, this is delightful, kids will drink the oddest things and especially at two, great write for the contest, love it
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Date: 2/18/2016 9:23:00 AM
Thanks Broken Wings :-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/17/2016 3:41:00 PM
very well done, my friend. I messed up thinking it had six syllables so now I need to see if I can whittle mine down before I post it!!
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Date: 2/18/2016 9:22:00 AM
It is a real challenge Andrea I just hope the sponsor likes it:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/17/2016 12:46:00 PM
True to form and a great true life story. Sure to op the winners list, Jan. Elaine
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Date: 2/18/2016 9:22:00 AM
Thanks Elaine:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/17/2016 7:14:00 AM
Wow, interesting poetic form and you made it flawless. The story too, is one that is fairly common. kids will get into anything! Nice write Jan...hugs xxx
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Date: 2/17/2016 7:23:00 AM
I guess it shows that we do have to be careful what examples we set to our children as they love to copy. I will be honest I really struggled with it Cas as it is such a short form and to get the rhyme and syllable count was tricky to comply with. :-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/17/2016 4:46:00 AM
- O.m.g. !!!!! - A great poem - Poor sister, maybe it was the first and last beer for her :))) - Luck in contest, Jan - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/17/2016 4:59:00 AM
She drinks soft drinks these days lol:-) I guess kids do copy their parents - when he was quite young I remember asking my son what he would like to drink and he said 'lager' lol - I guess it's proof kids do copy their parents - of course he should have answered tea because that's what I drink lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/17/2016 1:13:00 AM
even though mr than-bauk is very strict, it didn't touch that humour in you, wow you Jan!, excellent, best of luck in the contest
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Date: 2/17/2016 4:20:00 AM
It is a hard form to write with the restriction on syllables and rhyme scheme but I have given it a go - that is what I love about the contests challenging our creativity:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/16/2016 11:08:00 PM
I like to try new forms, but the than-bauk intimidates me. Cool that you were able to tell a real life story in a difficult form.
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Date: 2/17/2016 4:18:00 AM
I like to try new forms this was very challenging indeed:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/16/2016 10:30:00 PM
A beer to remember....funny how little things come back over the years....Thanks I enjoyed reading this....
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Jan Allison
Date: 2/17/2016 4:18:00 AM
Mum still talks about it lol - :-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/16/2016 7:42:00 PM
I agree very clever indeed
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Jan Allison
Date: 2/17/2016 4:16:00 AM
Its quite a challenge Brian:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 2/16/2016 6:37:00 PM
Jan, very clever as always...awesome *smiles* -luloo
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Jan Allison
Date: 2/17/2016 4:16:00 AM
Thanks Luloo it is quite a challenge but I enjoy trying new forms:-) hugs Jan xx
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