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Octoberleaves

OCTOBER LEAVES how they chatter wave sway catch the breeze sun struck then shadowed leaves on the pond ripples lifting shifting highlight gold to amber one early tree three leaves like children forlorn and clinging sun and moon turmoil never ceasing how they dance

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Debbie Duncan

Date: 10/22/2012 6:29:00 PM

Love these haiku's of yours ;}

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 10/18/2012 11:24:00 AM

Love your series of haiku on Oct. leaves. love phyl

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2012 1:51:00 PM

daver, that was a typo I had made. Thanks for calling my attention to it. I had meant to say: ATOP his wife's grave. GEEEEZ.

Wilma Neels

Date: 10/16/2012 12:38:00 PM

A beautiful scene captured Daver! Love this gem ;) hope you are doing okay, love Wilma

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 10/14/2012 7:23:00 PM

A moment in time beautifully rendered. The pen truly is mightier than the sword. Love Lizzie

Carol Eastman

Date: 10/12/2012 1:34:00 PM

Great imagery. Loved the three leaves.

Kathryn Collins

Date: 10/12/2012 8:01:00 AM

Hi Dave - love the three leaves clinging like children. love, Kathy

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/12/2012 12:55:00 AM

wow, I adored that third stanza on the three children leaves. So cute, Daver.

Joe Maverick

Date: 10/11/2012 11:57:00 PM

Have'nt read many better than this one Daver, the picture of those 3 leaves sticks in my thoughts. As does feelings of irrelevance in life in general..) Mind you I always get contemplative around this time of year." Yours Joe..)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/11/2012 2:03:00 PM

A jewel of haiku poems Daver- oxox love Anne-Lise :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/11/2012 1:45:00 PM

I like the descriptive lines of next to the last Haiku..I remember my children in that stage so well..Great comparison between those last tenacious leaves and the clinging child..Enjoyed reading ...Sara