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Neglect - Emotive Write

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Neighbours hadn’t seen Johnny since his beloved wife’s funeral Even then, no one thought to check if the old man was okay Gasps of horror were heard when his body was discovered Limply hanging from the rafters of his bedroom ceiling Even the post piling up in the porch hadn’t alerted anyone Clasped in his hands a picture of his darling wife and a cell phone…. The last number he had dialled was the Samaritans Contest: Deep and Dark Sponsor: Broken Wings 12~25~15

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/16/2016 7:31:00 PM

anytime.... LINDA

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/16/2016 7:09:00 PM

again, thank you for supporting my comment.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/16/2016 7:14:00 PM

Thanks Linda:-) hugs jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/15/2016 10:06:00 PM

JAN, congratulations ~LINDA~

Jan Allison
Date: 1/16/2016 3:01:00 AM

Thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx

Skat A

Date: 1/8/2016 7:29:00 PM

Jan, Congratulations on your Deep and Dark win. **SKAT**

Jan Allison
Date: 1/8/2016 7:29:00 PM

Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman

Date: 1/8/2016 10:17:00 AM

Sad, Jan. Sometimes grief is insurmountable even when deep down we don't want it to be. Very nicely constructed poem. Like the use of the N spelling out the word Neglect and the would Neighbors as a counterpoint.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/8/2016 1:27:00 PM

Thanks James:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 1/8/2016 3:29:00 AM

Very well done, Jan. Congrats to you!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/8/2016 1:26:00 PM

Thanks Lin:-) hugs Jan xx

Michael Tor

Date: 1/7/2016 9:20:00 PM

Congratulations Jan on your win. Very well written!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/8/2016 2:16:00 AM

Thanks Michael ... I am thinking of you my friend:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 1/7/2016 9:13:00 PM

Back to congratulate you on your win!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/8/2016 2:15:00 AM

Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Janice Canerdy

Date: 1/7/2016 8:01:00 PM

Congratulations on your big win with this heart-wrenchingly beautiful poem! Janice

Jan Allison
Date: 1/8/2016 2:15:00 AM

Thanks Janice:-) hugs Jan xx

White Sage

Date: 1/7/2016 6:02:00 PM

Congratulations on the contest Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2016 6:04:00 PM

Thanks White Sage:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 1/7/2016 5:04:00 PM

So deep, and so dark, and so emotionally expressed, Jan. Congratulations on your podium win. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2016 5:06:00 PM

Thanks Sandra I have no idea where these deep dark writes come from but I guess jacques and Torin's deaths last year are always in the back of my mind:-( hugs Jan xx

Caycay Jennings

Date: 12/31/2015 12:27:00 AM

Wow - deep and dark it is, you went to a very dark imaginative place and created an impressive acrostic ... CayCay

Jan Allison
Date: 12/31/2015 3:56:00 AM

I have no control over where my pen will take me CayCay:-( hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 12/27/2015 12:25:00 PM

Perfect..this will definitely make the winners list girly...*smiles* -luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 12/27/2015 12:35:00 PM

I am not sure if it is what Broken Wings is looking for but I have to go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs Jan x

Eve Roper

Date: 12/26/2015 6:28:00 PM

This is hard and very emotional. I have know a few young men close to me commit suicide and it is devastating. Good luck in the contest dear friend.

Eve Roper
Date: 12/26/2015 7:03:00 PM

Beautiful

Jan Allison
Date: 12/26/2015 6:30:00 PM

I know of a couple of people Eve I just imagined an old man losing his wife and not wanting to continue with life and the rest of the poem just flowed:-( hugs Jan xx

Kim Van Breda

Date: 12/26/2015 3:37:00 PM

WOW Jan... read this and instant goosebumps rose on my arms... so tragic and often a truth we choose to turn a blind eye to. Excellent Acrostic #7 ~~X~~

Jan Allison
Date: 12/26/2015 3:38:00 PM

Not sure if will get anywhere in the contest I think it is maybe just sad rather than deep and dark but i can only go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 12/26/2015 12:11:00 AM

Wow, I see I have some competition for dark and darker! Great write!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/26/2015 6:14:00 AM

I think your suicide poem must have inspired me as this is not my usual style:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 12/25/2015 7:06:00 PM

That is indeed dark and deep but more importantly...it's true talent....Congratulations...

Jan Allison
Date: 12/25/2015 7:08:00 PM

Thanks Judy not sure if it is deep and dark or deep and sad but I have to go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/25/2015 4:58:00 PM

Hi Jan, I want to Wish you a Merry Christmas and Happy New Year May all your days shine and dreams come true. :) Every day should be a day with family and friends. I appreciate everyone. Sorry to all those I have taken for granted. SHAME ON ME. I promise, 2016 will be a new me. Merry Christmas!!! May the true meaning of the holiday season fill your heart and home. Always & Forever ~LINDA~

Jan Allison
Date: 12/25/2015 5:07:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by Linda - life issues take us away from doing a lot of things we enjoy and that includes soup - let's hope for better things for us all for 2016. I LOVED writing with you for your challenge and was so proud of the poem we penned - you are an awesome poet Linda never forget that!:-) hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/25/2015 4:51:00 PM

Well, it is sad that the suicide happened without anyone to be able to stop it..I am not sure if this was a real event or just a made up event from your mom's experiences..Enjoyed reading your contest entry..Thanks for stopping by my blog..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 12/25/2015 4:53:00 PM

total fiction on my part Sara it is a sad poem but I have to go with the flow of my pen:-( hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/25/2015 3:48:00 PM

This kind of thing is truly sad, Jan. (I wonder why he was calling the Samaritans, did you mean that maybe he was trying to stop what he had started?) Now I need to think what to do for this one!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/25/2015 3:58:00 PM

I left it open to interpretation - was he calling to say he was depressed and was going to take his life or call them to talk about it and then still carry the act out... so sad - my mum used to man the phones for the samariatans when we lived in the Uk many many years ago - she was always exhausted mentally after her shift:-( hugs Jan xx

John Fleming

Date: 12/25/2015 2:59:00 PM

Very poignant! Unfortunately I have experienced the great sadness of knowing at least three people who had decided it was more preferable to swing...A great tragedy for all concerned!! A very merry Christmas to you, Jan, and a happy new year! My very best regards! :) john

Jan Allison
Date: 12/25/2015 3:02:00 PM

Thanks John:-) I guess I shouldn't be writing poems like this especially on Christmas day but I have to go with the flow of my pen:-( This time of year is not a happy time for all. Hope you had a great Christmas with your loved ones:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 12/25/2015 1:27:00 PM

sullen and deep, jan... i am so taken by this wonderful piece.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 12/25/2015 1:29:00 PM

Not sure if it is what Broken Wings is after but have to go with the flow of my pen:-( Hope you had a wonderful day with your loved ones Nette:-) hugs Jan xx

John Hamilton

Date: 12/25/2015 12:31:00 PM

Jan this is a wonderful acrostic, very nice flow, you were totally unencumbered by the enforced structure, felt like a natural poem. You should do very well with this one!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/25/2015 12:37:00 PM

Thanks John :-) I'm not sure if it is deep and dark enough but it sure is sad and I have to go with the flow of my pen even on Christmas day lol - I thought I would set myself a challenge with the acrostic form and this tough subject matter:-) hope you are having a wonderful day:-) hugs Jan xxx

Matthew Anish

Date: 12/25/2015 12:02:00 PM

This is a sad tale. Hope you do well in the contest. My old poetry teacher wrote a book length acrostic called "Darkling". Peace & Power Matthew Anish P.S. Where did you work as a nanny for a Jewish family?

Jan Allison
Date: 12/25/2015 12:08:00 PM

I worked in East Finchley (near Golder's Green) in London and also at a place called Alvechurch in Worcester it was many years ago!:-) hugs Jan xx