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Room Without Light

There's a breathing room looming Around me, vacantly alive but viscous; Feeling the bitter dead breath While grating still, fully motionless Like a thick,pungent mound of darkness; As the chill runs unto my raw bones... Nothing satisfies its hideous plight With eyes wide open, a nightmare Screaming devilishly at the ceiling; Restless, growing weary down the marrow... I reach for the lamp..it is shut, broken Until my instinct wakes; this room is the Fear Lying deep within a childhood's unsettled sin. For Brian Strand's Mid-January 2018 Premiere: Resubmitted 1/12/2018

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Date: 1/17/2018 9:31:00 PM
Congrats on your win, nette. Well done.
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Date: 1/13/2018 9:24:00 AM
Well done, Nette! congratulations on your win! ...Fran
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Date: 10/14/2015 10:24:00 PM
Nette, Congratulations on your awesome win. SKAT :)
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Date: 10/13/2015 11:50:00 PM
Wonderful take on the theme nette with this superb winning write! Big congrats!
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Date: 10/13/2015 5:03:00 PM
Oh I forgot , a '7' for the poem and a '10' for the writer...
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Date: 10/13/2015 4:57:00 PM
'Nailing my thoughts on cracked walls'...What a LINE to introduce a mind-blowing ending! Wait, I've got one more...'Screaming devilishly at the ceiling'...WOW, you have a dark side too I see and I think, no I KNOW that I like it...Congratulations are most DEFINITELY in order my friend - Tim
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Date: 10/13/2015 4:43:00 PM
nette congratulations on your cleverly written poem. A well deserving win.
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Date: 10/13/2015 11:01:00 AM
Nette this rightly deserves a 7! Congrats on your win!
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Date: 9/27/2015 7:59:00 PM
Bit of a surprise ending in this Poe - like work! Thank you for your support and keep writing! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 9/27/2015 7:02:00 PM
A riveting read, Nettie. Loved how graceful every line is despite the theme. Best! hugs!
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Date: 9/27/2015 2:07:00 PM
You held me to bits and surprised me with your last lines. Spellbinding thriller!
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Date: 9/27/2015 1:58:00 PM
.... wooow..... mystique at a high level, dear Nette - Luck in contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/27/2015 12:14:00 PM
Morbidly dark and arresting. The twist in the end gave me goosebumps! Top-of the line poetry!
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