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Mind-Boggling Disarray

There's madness in enlightenment, preferring darkly recesses of denial whilst moon descends sensibilities, shedding white powder florescence fracturing every crack & crevice, most days long to dwell in oblivion, remembers it fondly, before unicorns and monsters became real and materialized taunting duskiest memories always knew in her bones that something was askew, fear and breathlessness a huge part of her psyche, on the surface she seemed to have it together but, her marrow was aware, as dysfunctional trembled - - nagging blitzed neurons, felt its prevailing intrusiveness a foreboding presence beckoning in blindingly echoed vocalizations, long before time even existed She lives in continuous disorder, tucked away within her own reflection chaos extruding every wakeful moment, powerless to cease mind-boggling adaptations

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Date: 12/12/2016 6:49:00 AM
If this poem is the result of living in continuous disorder, then I say take all of the alphabetically placed cards and toss them straight up into the air, because disorder needs to be the order of the day. Really cool Paloma, scattered thoughts placed on a page for us to wander through...I think I got lost in there
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Date: 12/10/2016 7:45:00 PM
I was in love with this by the 2nd line! You have explored, in Paloma fashion, denial and many of its forms. I bet if I read again, I'd pick up on more 'explorations' and you are definitely a writer to be read more than once. You could be studied line by line and still have more revealed afterwards. Yi, girl ... CayCay
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Date: 12/10/2016 5:57:00 PM
A bit of moon madness Paloma. An explosion of thoughts, scattered yet articulate in contrast. I enjoyed it! 7 ; )
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Date: 12/10/2016 6:52:00 PM
Moon madness, I plead the fifth. :) Thanks Connie.
Date: 12/10/2016 5:52:00 PM
A peek into the warped mind of an unbalanced person. Fascinating poem, Paloma. Scary, but undeniably thrilling ride into the heart of madness. Functionally insane, I suppose. Love the prose. Love always.
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Date: 12/10/2016 6:52:00 PM
Yeah, that unbalanced brain is mine. :) Functionally insane, isn't that an oxymoron Freddie? Or is that like a highly-functional drunk. Thanks so much.
Date: 12/10/2016 3:03:00 PM
Quite a ride.
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Date: 12/10/2016 3:28:00 PM
Grazie mille Doug, you're welcome any time. :)
Date: 12/10/2016 11:41:00 AM
WoW! Paloma, it was as though you let the reader see into the mind of someone with a mental disorder. I must say It was a the bizarre trip. Well done. A without doubt 7+ :-) Alexis
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Date: 12/10/2016 3:26:00 PM
Thanks Alexis, much appreciated, glad it took you there. :)
Date: 12/10/2016 10:44:00 AM
This piece has a schizophrenic feel to it. A well expressed captivating piece.
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Date: 12/10/2016 10:52:00 AM
I'm not schizophrenic and neither am I. :) Thanks much Richard.
Date: 12/10/2016 9:08:00 AM
I suppose it would all depend on the type of enlightenment. My thoughts are with you, Paloma. Hoping all is well with you:)
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Date: 12/10/2016 9:11:00 AM
Oblivion is golden. I'm fine, just writing o'bit of poetic madness to occupy my mind. :) Grazie mille Danny.
Date: 12/10/2016 8:14:00 AM
Wow Paloma - you have it going this morning! What an intense poem describing truth of what many can go through. Well done :)
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Date: 12/10/2016 9:05:00 AM
Thrilled you enjoyed this one Heidi, yep it's a shame. :)

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