Mercury

The great force That may raise me to a saintly cloud. I walk an air of calm delivery, Above the torrent and hollow reproach To the gaping breath and bliss, I say! Send each thought into the winds, dipped in mercury. For truly, there is none more beautiful than the open sky, When it is seen through the view of the solitary eye.

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Karen Anglesey

Date: 8/24/2013 12:52:00 PM

Gallant and euphoric ... I don't think I've used those words to describe poetry before...but they certainly apply to this lovely 'floating on air' poem :)

Just That Archaic Poet

Date: 8/23/2013 6:48:00 AM

"I walk an air of calm delivery"- another awesome line that I wish I had penned myself. You said to me you wish you could match my ability to be brief and impactful; well, I believe you absolutely have the skill to do the same; you have demonstrated it here. I look forward to reading more of your work; please, post more! :)

Aiden Asoll
Date: 8/23/2013 10:15:00 AM

Thanks!! You give brilliant feedback really glad you like my poetry.

Kim Van Breda

Date: 8/22/2013 8:22:00 AM

Wonderful piece of descriptive poetry.

Skat A

Date: 8/21/2013 6:47:00 PM

nothing quite beautiful like nature and it's many visuals we seek and stumble upon, a lovely write, LUV S.K.A.T.

Aiden Asoll
Date: 8/22/2013 4:01:00 AM

hey SKAT, cheers, this was something I once just wrote looking out the window in a science lesson, so its fairly old. Found it again the other day but thought i'd upload it, for me encapsulates everything I live for, so I'm glad other people can also find similar joy in nature, thankyou

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/21/2013 5:39:00 PM

Hello Aiden it was nice hearing from you... this one happens to be a nice rising of you. you kind of gave it an inadvisable feel... Always~ Linda

Aiden Asoll
Date: 8/22/2013 4:16:00 AM

Hey thanks, really glad you're enjoying my poetry, SKAT aswell, always feel a bit unsure about what I write till someone comments, so thankyou. Yeah, this one feels slightly different to others when I read it again the other day, not exactly sure why. It's short, but conveys a point very close to my heart, glad you like it.