Home » Poems » Richard Lamoureux » Me Between Minds

Me Between Minds

Smile little child Smile for me Me who is you Me who cries Cries for her Cries because Because I knew Because I was there There is no excuse There was a way Way back then Way too much pain Pain we carry Pain we hid Hid behind smiles Hid under years Years passed quickly Years changed nothing Nothing was done Nothing was a difficult easy Easy does it Easy to wait Wait for the right moment Wait for courage Courage to say Courage to feel Feel our way here Feel all those feeling Feelings will be hurt Feelings can heal Heal all of us Heal what was taken Taken childhood Taken trust Trust is hard Trust me Me who was there Me who witnessed Witnessed too much Witnessed more More than I knew More of the shame Shame on him Shame games Games in the dark Games played with our minds Minds controlled by need Minds bound by unspoken Unspoken Need

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Edlynn Nau

Date: 5/28/2016 4:32:00 PM

I had trouble with: "Nothing was a difficult easy." It stopped my flow and reading. Suggestion: Nothing was difficult, all was easy? Other than this tiny glitch, I loved this! So well done. You made me WANT to try a Blitz & I haven't wanted to before. Ha! My favorite: "Wait for the right moment, Wait for courage, courage to say, courage to feel" YES!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/29/2016 7:53:00 AM

What I am saying with the line is how easily it is to do nothing and ultimately it leads to other difficulties in life when we bury our pain.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/27/2016 12:00:00 PM

WOW...this was an awesome write, Richard. So many lines speak to my heart tonight. My heart is heavy. This is a lovely thing to write about. I trust you...because you have integrity. Many....don't. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/28/2016 1:14:00 AM

You are sweet, I try my best to live with integrity. Thanks for the visit, I'm sorry your heart is heavy.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/26/2016 1:51:00 PM

.... and yet again you excel with the Blitz! The memories and the heartache felt absolutely real to me, as if I was living it. You ought to do this more often! What I love about the blitz is that I almost never know what it's going to be about when you start ... you can't control it, but rather you just got let if flow out, and unlock whatever is there inside of you.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/26/2016 2:44:00 PM

It's a combination of letting it flow and still maintaining focus. Kind of like riding a wild bronco, it's easy to get thrown off! Thanks for commenting Timothy.

Miraj Raha

Date: 5/26/2016 12:24:00 PM

breathe,sir Richard,breathe.your every line is a rhetoric,punching my heart over and over again.Immaculate write.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/26/2016 7:21:00 PM

Thanks Miraj, a great comment.;0)

John Hamilton

Date: 5/26/2016 12:21:00 PM

What a powerful write Richard, a coherent theme throughout, forcefully short expressions, loved the form. Is there a syllable restriction to each line? I will try it maybe.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/26/2016 7:26:00 PM

Not that I am aware of John. It is a difficult form to stay on point with but when you do the results are powerful.

Tim Smith

Date: 5/26/2016 11:39:00 AM

Not many times will this form carry a message throughout but I got everything you said Richard. Many times it is hard to speak up when we are on the "inside". Once we are removed from the situation we can see and speak out.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/26/2016 7:27:00 PM

Even then the truth can be held back for many years.

Lukas Ficklin

Date: 5/26/2016 9:18:00 AM

WOW Richard.. this is excellent! I've been looking at this form to try it. Great example here. I hope you don't mind me saying that the proper homonym in lines 12 and 39 is "too much"... an extra o in too signifies an amount. :) I will come back to read this one again for sure. Thanks for sharing

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/26/2016 7:28:00 PM

Feel free to speak up any time. Take care.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/26/2016 9:40:00 AM

Thanks Lukas, for some reason I make that same mistake over and over again. If you have time checkout my web page www.wisedummypoet.com I appreciate your visit, welcome to the soup.