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Love Triangle - End Line Contest

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We are so different you and ................ I I couldn’t behave like you have............. NEVER You are so self centered...I want, I........ WANT Guess we need to stop all forms of.........CONTACT She’s the one you really want to be ........WITH You don’t care about me, it’s all about......YOU Don’t cross my path ever ......................AGAIN End Line Word – Sponsor -HGarvey Daniel Esquire 08~04~15

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James Fraser

Date: 10/10/2015 1:52:00 PM

A picture of life painted by your words Jan, nice//James xx

Jan Allison
Date: 10/10/2015 2:23:00 PM

I enjoyed the challenge here James its a form I've never tried before:-)hugs Jan xx

Boygene Rabura

Date: 10/9/2015 3:30:00 AM

this is awesome. i feel it,some emotions attached to it. pleasure to read your script.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/9/2015 4:45:00 AM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment Boygene:-) hugs jan xx

James Inman

Date: 8/6/2015 11:37:00 AM

Jan, you commented on my End Line and said you were struggling with yours. It was well worth the effort. I love it.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/6/2015 11:51:00 AM

Thanks James - yours is far superior in my estimation:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 8/6/2015 4:29:00 AM

Short, but quite a slammer, Jan!! Looks like it's the end of this love triangle! Hugs // paul .... [ps~great news about Darren!]

Jan Allison
Date: 8/6/2015 5:36:00 AM

Thanks Paul - I have been on cloud 9 since i heard from him - best news this year:-) hugs jan xx

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 8/5/2015 11:30:00 PM

Hard hitting, and yes, a winner indeed. Very nicely done Jan! Always, Laura

Jan Allison
Date: 8/6/2015 12:01:00 AM

Thanks Laura - please send my regards to David please I have not seem him around recently:-) hugs jan xx

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 8/5/2015 4:01:00 PM

This. Is. A. Winner!!! I . Love:-)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/5/2015 4:02:00 PM

Thanks so much Njeri - have never tried this form before it was a great challenge:-) hugs jan xx

Emile Pinet

Date: 8/5/2015 2:48:00 PM

A well structured poem that flows with strong emotional currents. Well written. Emile.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/5/2015 3:21:00 PM

Thanks so much Emile :-) hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 8/5/2015 7:16:00 AM

I'm back. Had to talk to someone earlier. And again, this too is one for the wins... I checked the requirement and you'de done it with strong voice! Loved how you did it! hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/5/2015 3:19:00 PM

Blog has gone up on the interview and another one about my news finally heard from my writing partner Darren after a 9 month silence- am simply bursting with happiness:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 8/5/2015 8:06:00 AM

Thanks Kim - have just had AMAZING news am shaking here will do a blog when I have calmed down! Hugs jan xx Just waiting for the interview to go on the radio now:-)

Constance La France

Date: 8/5/2015 6:59:00 AM

Jan, you did this so well 7 and thanks for visiting my sunset poem, wow poem of the day!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/5/2015 7:00:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by and congrats again:-) hugs jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 8/4/2015 8:20:00 PM

Unusual write Jan, but the message is loud and clear - good luck - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 8/5/2015 2:36:00 AM

Thanks Lindsay I have to go with my muse lol:-) hugs jan xx

Daver Austin

Date: 8/4/2015 4:25:00 PM

Hey! Squash that mamma! This does double duty to some very bad dude, eh. Love, daver

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2015 4:35:00 PM

Thanks Daver:-)thankfully it is just written for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Nathan D.

Date: 8/4/2015 3:28:00 PM

Jan, sad in every way. I would definitely love to see this one score high in Harvey's contest. Love Nate

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2015 3:33:00 PM

Thanks Nathan - it is my first attempt at the form and first time I have entered one of Harvey's contests so i have my wings crossed he likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Eric Boddie

Date: 8/4/2015 11:02:00 AM

this write is a thing of Beauty....two in one, your words on double duty....such emotion inspires the best in me....and in this selection, you did so effortlessly....;)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2015 11:11:00 AM

Thank you for such a lovely comment Eric:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/4/2015 10:29:00 AM

You rock, girl. Intriguing write. I like it....very much. Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2015 10:56:00 AM

Thanks Eileen :-) I may play with the second line a little but overall am happy with the poem:-) hugs jan xx

Anna Hopper

Date: 8/4/2015 9:23:00 AM

Nice job!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2015 9:46:00 AM

thanks Anna:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/4/2015 8:44:00 AM

Jan, I like how you did your entry. I gotta get busy on one soon!! The only end line that seemed a bit strange to me was line 2's. Maybe because you were using that expression. "WEll, I Never!!" ? You are flying high in the poetry sky, my friend. So many poems!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2015 9:45:00 AM

Thanks Andrea - I may revamp line 2 trying to say I would never behave like them - Never ....Only one poem a day unless a contest is closing:-) still working on Nette's:-) hugs Jan xx