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I made a promise, a little visit A busy day...so much to do.. But, I'm running late, they will be waiting... I should be going...the clock is ticking I'll take just a minute for a quick hello no need to linger, ...and then I'll go I grip my keys, and make excuses... She seems confused....unduly quiet Oh dear, it's useless, ... her voice is desperate "You must try a piece of cake. Made fresh this morning,.. no need to hurry! The tea is hot. Let's have a chat, you must be thirsty!" (The clock is glaring.....I need to scurry....) (My life is busy....this day's been crazy) "I can't stay long..... a late appointment.... I have to go,"... was my reply (Oh dear, it's clear, she tries to hide sheer disappointment,,,, I cannot lie!) ..... She walks her cane, across the floor, her smile is kind... I have declined, with clear remorse I start to say one last good-bye, hand on the knob of her front door "Would you like to take a pot of violets? It would take just one moment, before you go" I can't refuse, how could I now? I see the longing in her eyes And now we've walked to a screened porch The sun's a torch that lights the room Her potted blooms are in a row, a glorious show of mauve and blue They sit so proudly like pots of gold In glorious colors,.....I must behold I smile expressions, sheer admiration Her anxious look turns to delight !... Her face lights up just like the sun Years melt away from somber eyes. I've asked her "What, could be your secret, to grow these perfect spring bouquets?" "The fragrance sweeps a magic potion, that makes me want to spend all day!" "Please tell me more, I'd like to know." We sit and chat, and I'm enthralled..... "Leftover tea leaves? Helps them to grow?"..... "Now who would guess? Please tell me more!" Her eyes are wide, with my request This time I know just what to do "I'd love to share some tea with you" That's how we spent all afternoon She cut the cake I poured the tea......Her smile was worth a million suns I noticed then,.. that afternoon.......her eyes were blooms of violet too _______________________________________________________________ Contest: A Conversation Sponsored by Frank Herrera

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Date: 6/3/2018 10:45:00 PM
Just taking time to read a few of my favorites. It reads as well as the first time. Makes me want cake and tea!
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Date: 9/7/2016 11:59:00 PM
Lovely, just lovely. Such sweet tears of joy this poem brings. ...Congratulations, Carrie. ...Fran
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Date: 9/7/2016 12:55:00 PM
Beautiful! Love the violet eyes! Congratulations!
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Date: 9/7/2016 11:05:00 AM
This is so emotional and true in the busy lives that we live,never a minute to spare:( Congrats on your win Carrie!
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Date: 9/6/2016 1:44:00 PM
This is a wonderful write Carrie, a reminder to make time for the older ones in our lives, we are the ones who need to slow down and smell the violets? Congrats on a great win!
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Date: 9/6/2016 8:06:00 AM
Carrie, congratulations on your Trophy First Place win in the 'conversation' Premier Contest. Your poem was so wonderfully written and touched my heart very much. A 7 and Fav for me! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 9/6/2016 5:10:00 AM
Congrats Carrie, for your well, deserved first placement with this awesome piece!! ;-)
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Date: 9/5/2016 11:44:00 PM
So much flowing emotion...nicely penned. Congrats on your 1st place. Sunita
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Date: 9/5/2016 11:04:00 PM
Carrie it's brilliant, the way you have emoted the emotions from both sides and lovely portrayal of the feelings. The flow is simply natural too. Deserves a million win. Congratulations for the top placement.
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Date: 9/5/2016 9:51:00 PM
You had my eyeballs spinning this way and that. ;-) A passionate, hyper, flowery conversation. Congrats!
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Date: 9/5/2016 8:47:00 PM
Carrie, well I'm glad I don't have make up on how it would be running down my cheeks. We need to make time in our lives for people, especially people like the person that you mention in this poem. It means everything to them, and we come out the winners. This is such a beautiful poem so touching and so deserving of first place! Congratulations my friend! 7 ; )
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Date: 9/5/2016 8:46:00 PM
What a beautiful, moving poem! Great job on the blank verse. Congrats on your well-deserved top win, Carrie. Janice
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Date: 9/5/2016 7:44:00 PM
So many lonely people out there, asking for so little. A truly wonderful write, and a worthy topster, Carrie. Well done, young lady. Viv x
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Date: 9/5/2016 7:36:00 PM
Congrats on your top placement Carrie! :)-luloo
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Date: 9/5/2016 7:01:00 PM
This poem is one everyone should relate to, a global theme that has had us all on one side or the other of the conversation. Me, the one leaving, but someday I suspect I'll be on the other side of it. A well earned Congratulations to you! CayCay
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Date: 9/5/2016 7:00:00 PM
Congratulations on your win...when the moment of choice came you did the right thing...to give of your time ,no greater gift
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Date: 1/24/2014 2:24:00 PM
carrie, such sense of bewilderment graces this page... big cheers on your shuning win!.. huggs
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Date: 1/23/2014 8:10:00 PM
Enjoyed the write on loneliness and congrats on the fine win, Carrie
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Date: 9/23/2009 9:17:00 AM
Wonderful write. Just a pleasure. Vince
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Date: 8/17/2009 2:52:00 PM
Sure and it makes this old man shed a tear ta hear sich talk. Wonderful OLD story. You talk about Deborah's contest...I've never entered one before, but with your encouragement...... Love, daver
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Date: 8/17/2009 11:34:00 AM
This is a very beautful write, lovely imagery, tendert tones and fabulous flow. Thank you Carrie for sharing such a precious read. God Bless, Always, Adell
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Date: 8/17/2009 8:34:00 AM
dam.. that was great, you really can write that sounded so much like part of a novel or something. Thank you for your comments as well. Enjoy your day.
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Date: 8/17/2009 5:09:00 AM
Good morning Carrie. Thank you for sharing your poetry with us today. I truly enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/16/2009 11:39:00 PM
Thank you for your blog comments today Carrie.Rgds Brian
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Date: 8/16/2009 5:52:00 PM
This touched something deep inside me. Im always rushing, my agenda, my plans, my time. Its so hard to realize that such a small part of our day can be such a large gift to another. Hmmm, haven't been on forever and you young lady kicked my butt. Guess I'll put this in favs and then print it~
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