Lions Ride Your Elevator

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This poem was actually written as a childrens book for which I am also doing the illustrations. I will post (some of) them when they are complete...

Bears hide in your bath....

======================== First you got an alligator. Next came a giraffe. Lions ride your elevator..... Bears hide in your bath. Bunnies... Chimps... (a duck!)... Raccoons... run amok through all your rooms! Soon, if you don't set them free, there will be no room for me! ========================

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Eve Roper

Date: 8/28/2015 3:11:00 PM

Very Creative, at first I thought the image was a Z then realize it's facing the wrong way, any way is the fool but I love your poem your duck is though quite crowded. a 7 Hugs Eve

Lycia Harding
Date: 8/29/2015 4:15:00 AM

Excellent! Thank you, my Dear - your opinion is valued. xoxo

Eve Roper
Date: 8/29/2015 12:12:00 AM

Most certainly, very eye catching. Very creative Hugs Eve

Lycia Harding
Date: 8/28/2015 11:36:00 PM

Thank you, Eve! I wasn't really thinking of any shape in particular - I just thought I'd try an eye catching layout to help advance the 'plot' of the write. What do you think? Does it assist the flow?

Eric Boddie

Date: 8/21/2015 5:20:00 PM

in this tale you put us in....I really don't know where to begin....maybe after several shots of gin....I will know who was that lonely ducks best friend....lol

Lycia Harding
Date: 8/27/2015 2:52:00 PM

Your concern is understood/../Some advice from one who cares/../If you're in the neighborhood/../Please make sure you take the stairs!

Eric Boddie
Date: 8/22/2015 3:30:00 AM

now I will never be a hater....but why is that lion on the elevator....I hope you don't think I am getting in....the reason I don't swim with sharks is because I Love my Life my Beautiful friend.....lol

Lycia Harding
Date: 8/21/2015 6:31:00 PM

cuz that little duckies plight/../would have caused a big debate/../I had to revise this write/../now that duckie don't get ate/../@===================@/../I thought that's how it should go/../that way I could keep my friend/../mutha f#@&er cross me, though/../I'll put THAT end right back in!

Jan Allison

Date: 8/21/2015 2:05:00 PM

ha ha ha love the humour good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Lycia Harding
Date: 8/21/2015 3:51:00 PM

Ha! Thank you, Jan. I don't have kids but find myself writing for them frequently, anyway. They make a much less finicky audience! xoxo