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Life - Team Contest - Tanka and Quatern

Poem 1 Her heart stirred, she smiled looking at the face she loved. His eyes mirrored hope remembering their lost love crushed by fate, re-awakened Penned on 26/08/2013 using Form : Tanka by Wayland Bunch and Seren Roberts Contest : Team Work Poem 2 Where is the light that lived within, Why has the flame of doubt appeared. The trees bend slightly in the wind Towards darkness, now have you veered. Focus on the things dear to you, Where is the light that lived within. Your day will come before it's through, You that have, not died, with sin. Deep in your soul, you seek therein The pleasures, that should not have been. Where is the light that lived within. Questions of how this came and when How long have you abandoned life What have you done, where have you been, Will you choose to remain in strife Where is the light, that lived within. Penned on 26/08/2013 Form: Quatern by Seren Roberts and Wayland Bunch for Contest: Team Work

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Date: 12/8/2023 10:50:00 PM
Now I'm back looking at them again. I see your placed fourth, while I placed 6 I think. I can't blame the judge you're definitely cuter than me lol. Wow ten years ago. While I usually say time has flown, it seems an eternity ago we were doing this. I hope you're doing well.
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Date: 10/7/2013 4:17:00 PM
Well I was happy with the outcome before the judgement. I really like the Quatern, I guess because it's longer and we had more from each of us. It's funny now, I look at it, and some lines not sure if they were mine or yours, and I have a pretty good memory, I guess that is a sign of great teamwork. I guess the whole poem still speaks to me. I must say seeing who we placed with is an impressive list of poets here, so that's pretty spectacular. Thanks again for working with me.
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Seren Roberts
Date: 10/8/2013 3:20:00 AM
Was a pleasure Wayland anytime you wish to do it again just let me know.. Yes we did well with both of them...Seren
Date: 10/3/2013 1:50:00 PM
Congrats on your great win..Way to go..Sara
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Date: 10/3/2013 11:06:00 AM
nice team work... lovely win............SKAT
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Date: 10/1/2013 7:33:00 PM
I really like this one, so glad to see you both on the winners list.
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Date: 10/1/2013 3:40:00 PM
congrats on 3rd with poem 2 in team work contest Ty for entering Shadow x smile
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Date: 9/6/2013 2:42:00 AM
Nice work both of you , should do well in the contest xx
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Seren Roberts
Date: 9/24/2013 6:41:00 PM
Thanks Mandy
Date: 8/30/2013 9:26:00 AM
by the way, did you visit that blog of Craig's when he was explaining the meter of Sapphic stanza. It is pretty much the opposite of iambic pentameter. If you follow his advice, the way he writes out the stressed/unstressed syllables, I think you could come up with something but you are right, it's kind of difficult to do. Hope you can write one!
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Date: 8/30/2013 9:25:00 AM
Seren, it's really cool to see you working with Wayland!! I want to do this challenge too but the person I asked didn't respond to me yet! Good luck in the contest and nicely done!
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Seren Roberts
Date: 9/2/2013 5:48:00 PM
Thats a shame Andrea...Seren
Date: 8/30/2013 4:17:00 AM
You both have done an excellent job Seren. The both poems should do very well in the contest.
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Seren Roberts
Date: 9/2/2013 5:49:00 PM
Thanks Mustapha ....Seren
Date: 8/28/2013 4:11:00 PM
I enjoyed both of these immensely while the were separate entities but now seeing them together they make perfect sense together! Great Work!!
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Seren Roberts
Date: 8/28/2013 4:14:00 PM
Hi Russelll, thanks for your kind comments, we hoped that ujsing different forms than just rhyme and verse, they would be ok...Seren

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