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Shhh.... Let us listen to the sun go down........ Here, take my hand, don't say a word, as the day says one last farewell Evening shadows softly dwell, as purple fades to gray Let us listen, ever closely, to what the moon will say Hold my hand, and come with me It will take your breath away We can watch the sun kneel slowly, as if in evening prayer The flowers folding petals, and birds tuck heads beneath their wings The daytime weary creatures, have gone to nest and lair While twilight paints it's canvas wide with brilliant crimson flair Be witness to the fire that grows so vast and wide Then listen very closely, to what the stars confide It is all about us slipping, into realms of blissful sleeping While twilight paints it's canvas, wide and sweeping Let's be witness to the fire that smolders until it's gone Time suspends this moment, in a fragile voice of song We'll see the faintest trace of moon begin to climb So gently, watch the dark erase the light Enclosing us within the voice of night Shh.... let us listen to the weary sun go down........ Listen ever closely, to what the moon will say Listen, as this day must slip away Shhhh……. __________________________________________________________ For the "Shush......Did you hear that?" Contest Sponsored by Anthony Slausen

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Date: 9/23/2018 11:11:00 PM
Congrats on your well deserved win, Carrie. Lovely.
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Date: 9/22/2018 10:48:00 AM
Beautiful, Carrie, Great imagery and some truly wonderful lines. Many Congrats to you on your well deserved win in the contest. ~Charlie
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Date: 9/21/2018 9:06:00 PM
Oh, so beautiful, Carrie, and the Pantoum form makes it sing the lovely imagery you present in your words in praise of twilight in all its splendor. Congratulations on your well-deserved Podium win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 9/26/2016 11:05:00 AM
Beautiful pantoum, Carrie. My favorite line, "All the daytime weary creatures, have gone to nest and lair." Congrats! :-)
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Date: 9/25/2016 3:14:00 PM
Such wonderful imagery Carrie many congrats:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 9/25/2016 11:34:00 AM
Sweet Carrie..."watch the dark erase the night"....so beautiful, loved this one :) congratulations on your placement! :)-luloo
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Date: 9/25/2016 3:33:00 AM
Beautiful, Carrie. I love your idea of *listening* to the sun setting. My favorite line is "While the evening shadows tiptoe to the cricket's slippered sounds". Congrats on your placement. Agnes
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Date: 9/24/2016 8:55:00 PM
Such a lovely Pantoum, Carrie. Very peaceful and perfect for the twilight theme. Congratulations on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 9/24/2016 7:46:00 PM
Not sure how I missed this one but Congratulations Mrs Carrie on your placement. It is such a peaceful time. I love listening to the crickets, frogs and the night birds.
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Date: 9/24/2016 3:45:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie on the placement of the contest.
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Date: 8/20/2013 9:21:00 PM
Hi Carrie, .congrats... love ~SKAT~ :)
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Date: 8/19/2013 5:15:00 PM
Carrie, a beautiful sunset poem ... congratulations!! PD
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Date: 8/19/2013 4:10:00 PM
oh Carrie you have written a beautiful poem congrats on your win Shadow x smile
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Date: 8/18/2013 9:23:00 AM
wow....beautiful... "While the evening shadows tiptoe to the crickets slippery sound"..I just love that line...congrats on a great win Carrie
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Date: 8/18/2013 8:57:00 AM
I enjoyed this sunset and your slippered Crickets! Congratulations.
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Date: 8/18/2013 5:35:00 AM
Congratulations on your win my dear friend Carrie. Thank you so much for your very spectacular and outstanding poem. I love it so much and so enjoyed. How I wish you've written your name at the bottom of your poem as included in my rules. Anyway, I consider this as one of my best entries.Thank you so much as well for your full support and everythin. Have a blessed day! Big hugs! Love lots, Leonora
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Date: 9/23/2010 8:57:00 AM
Congrats Carrie on your HM in the Pantoum contest.. a beautiful write and lovely honor for u to enjoy with luv...
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Date: 9/23/2010 8:41:00 AM
Thankfully, I don't have to "eat doo-doo and die" as I pledged I would if this poem hadn't placed, Carrie. Congratulations on your success in Jared's contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/9/2010 4:33:00 PM
carrie, an EXCELLENT title for this wondrous poem of yours. This is HOW a pantoum was meant to be. Repeating lines meant to make us FEEL something. IN this case, the tranquility and beauty of this time of day. If this doesn't place high, there is no justice. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 9/5/2010 4:48:00 AM
What a lovely serene beauty is flowing in this sweetly sketched Poem with so lovely a description of the diminishing Sun and silently emerging shadows. Great write my friend. My good wishes for your contest. Love and best wishes always....Ravindra...Carrie Richards
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Date: 8/28/2010 7:59:00 AM
Beautiful scene you give us here... good luck. Michael
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Date: 8/28/2010 4:14:00 AM
Wonderful peicture you have created of the sunset time, carrie. Good luck in the contest
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Date: 8/27/2010 7:32:00 PM
great write...I can here the bugs and frogs singing. The sun seems to say---yaaaawwwnnnnn....
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Date: 8/27/2010 6:11:00 PM
Truly a masterpiece of imagery, Carrie! And you worked so well with a form I find very difficult. How did you do it? I like the idea of not only watching, but "listening" to the sun going down. It seems to have sprung so smoothly from your pen. If this isn't a winner, I'll eat doo-doo and die. LOL Love, Carolyn
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Date: 8/27/2010 6:02:00 PM
A breathtakingly beautiful piece Carrie.. good luck in Jared's contest ... enjoy a happy weekend..with luv..
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