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In the land of giving where orphans openly share their palms of humility upon the fist of rough winds bearing the expired porridge warmed by brown sacks of hope, they flicker in candles waning blank. This is the purest of a melody soaked in gaunt eye-drops singing alone, infecting blue stars to radiate into their creased fingers. And the voice of alleys returns with the same promise for another dawn fading in yellow, stretching the reams of grasses growing tall, taller than the limbs of a city enduring all the empty cans, where mediocre socialite- smiles don their thickened masks on faces dark as hardened liver… all this hypocrisy in the land of giving. .................... Charlotte Puddifoot's Dark Poetry Contest 8/10/2014

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  1. Date: 8/22/2014 5:54:00 PM
    OOOOOOOOOOh... so incredibly good. Starts where and how it should and ends where and how it should. Infecting blue stars and hardened liver, two of my faves. Hope you are well and I know I have been gone too long. Is the rainy season approaching you? Are you well? I may not be around, but you are in my thoughts... love to you Soul Sis. (Summer here has been both strange and lovely, blissful and stressful. I am both dreading and impatient for September.) HUGGGGGS!!!!

  1. Date: 8/18/2014 1:26:00 PM
    Oh that touches my heart, so dark and sad, you describe it perfectly, you are always a winner Nette :) grats sweetie

  1. Date: 8/16/2014 8:51:00 PM
    Your poetry keeps getting better and better Nette. This deserving poem, winning top honors, shines a bright light on your talent. I am in awe of your work. Congratulations!!!

  1. Date: 8/16/2014 10:52:00 AM
    Sadly, this is the reality for so many people, and hay buhay, rings even truer lalo na dito-- I like the metaphors you used here, so eloquent, and your last two lines, really has an impact. Super congrats on your top win, nette!

  1. Date: 8/16/2014 1:22:00 AM
    Congrats on ur awesome winning dark poetry nette!

  1. Date: 8/15/2014 11:02:00 PM
    wowowow, GOOD one, Nette. Congrats on your well deserved win.

  1. Date: 8/15/2014 10:49:00 PM
    hmmm it's dark!! I'll give it that!! Congrad's hon Light & Love

  1. Date: 8/15/2014 8:41:00 PM
    love it Nette....PD

  1. Date: 8/15/2014 6:21:00 PM
    Outstanding Nette, congratulations on such a meaningful write

  1. Date: 8/15/2014 6:17:00 PM
    Beautifully personified Nette... Congratulations on the first place win... Verlena

  1. Date: 8/15/2014 1:23:00 PM
    Nette, beautiful, thoughtful write on a subject that needs all of our attention. Congratulations.

  1. Date: 8/15/2014 10:00:00 AM
    Wow........irony,and the terrible truth speaks between the lines of this sadly marked poem of desperation, the haves versus the have nots, in our troubled world, ......hypocrisy thrives behind the giving smile. Well said.....but yes.....dark indeed!

  1. Date: 8/15/2014 8:45:00 AM
    dropping back with my congrats nette:-) Hugs jan xxx

  1. Date: 8/15/2014 5:51:00 AM
    Very touchy and heartfelt write, nette. congrats on this first place win

  1. Date: 8/15/2014 5:20:00 AM
    it's no great surprise to see you here again, nette, we must stop meeting like this! lol...this is unsettling indeed, and sad; I particularly like the last lines in each stanza...the poem is beautifully penned - I don't think you have much 'dark' in that soul of yours, nette! congrats on your top win in my contest :)

  1. Date: 8/11/2014 12:07:00 PM
    when I sent the comment, it made me logout, and I lost my 7 rate for ya. So here it is!

  1. Date: 8/11/2014 12:05:00 PM
    "expired porridge, infecting blue stars, mediocre socialite" This FREE VERSE IS FREE WOMAN! ~ Hottt Diggity Dogg...on a roll of winning w/ Nette Pot Today. TWO BURNERS IN A ROW!!Don't remember last time I favorite-d two poems by the same poet in a ROW !!! IF EVER I did this, twaS 'long time 'Go. ~Did I tell you I heard your cute little laughter and voice on that poetry show online? You kept messing w/ the host by playing stuff over your computer, making noises. Real Funny Stuff! loved it. 7rate

  1. Date: 8/11/2014 3:12:00 AM
    Excellent. Strongly written. Well done madam. Enjoyed. Tfs

  1. Date: 8/10/2014 10:45:00 PM
    Dear Nette: A touch of magic here. Even abject poverty becomes charming! I hear a compassionate heart sighing. Lovely Nette, as only you can offer that unique glimpse. Well done my friend. All the best, Leon.

  1. Date: 8/10/2014 8:39:00 PM
    A tear dripped thank you for letting me know you have seen, felt, tasted this reality and I'm not alone to ponder the full essence of this darkness.. Fabulous write Nette!