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Lai-Rain

Evening sprinkles Refresh my flowers Lightning Lazar show thunders Excite molecules Meshing Muddy little boots Setting all in rows Piercing LAI poem introduced to me by Nette OnClaud. aab x3 a=5syllables and b=2 syllables. a's rhyme and b's rhyme.

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/15/2011 2:08:00 AM

refreshing Doris,..p.d.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/11/2011 11:33:00 PM

hmmm, I bet she will use this form in a contest. Way to emulate her little LAI form!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/11/2011 7:17:00 PM

thankxx Doris ..were u surprised by the ending? this is what the sponsor was looking for and since I grew up around 'gangsta village' haha.. and am related to many on TV oh..I thought I might as well go for it luv.. appreciate..

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/10/2011 12:46:00 PM

Thank you for posting your excellent poetry that we all may enjoy reading it Doris. I wish you the best in your writing endeavors. Love, Carol

Dan Kearley

Date: 8/10/2011 11:49:00 AM

X-celent Write Doris!

Joe Maverick

Date: 8/9/2011 7:11:00 PM

Enjoyed this unique write Doris, and my humble thanks for your last heartfelt comment..

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/9/2011 7:07:00 PM

Good one..Great first work..Enjoyed reading this eve..Thanks for stopping by..The pounds did not come to gather the wild wanderers...Mom

James Peranteau

Date: 8/9/2011 5:51:00 PM

An awesom write dear poet ! Very captivating and...ZAP, def. ful of energy ! Awesome ! Have an exciting week my friend ! Much love, james

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/9/2011 5:41:00 PM

wow u and Mom certainly aced this form Doris .. I will work on one ..too distraught over those poor soldiers killed and that private ceremony held in VA. this afternoon among thunderstorms.. glad u liked my little Limerick...luv.