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In Love- Our Story For Contest

In Love- Our story ( a sort of Sonnet) That first day in the factory, your eye had followed me as down the aisle I passed still lingered moments after I'd gone by, you vowed then that glance would not be your last. Your girl's intelligence network gave chase to find the whys and wherefores, who I be, get answers and a name put to the face returning with results by morning tea. The first dates nothing sparked, no hearts ablaze just questions, feelers, finding common ground, our differences plain in many ways, yet all it took was one bond to be found So thus by circumstance and stars were formed the elements that melded our love's dawn. As time and youth faced off and called 'en garde' anger and vicious words both took the field our tempers raged, a truce was just too hard, for neither would our stubborn ground we yield . But from within that fierce intensity, the furnace stoked by every spat and fight also came passion tempered then set free desire burned as cressets in our nights. Our opportunities, though all too rare, snatched moments, any time in any place, as if the world had run and left us there and gave our battered hearts some breathing space. The light from our love's morning showed the fact the truth that often opposites attract. That first midnight cry from the newborn child, your head fell back, relieved from hours of pain, eyes closed briefly and then you looked and smiled “ I'm never bloody doing that again”. The polar opposites that since we met both held us and repelled us, yin and yang, now by this nascent soul, the future let love tear them all asunder, left to hang. The baby, girl, teenager, woman grew, tended by us, fed food and word and song, full fledged in mind and body, off she flew, the two of us now left to get along. Without her we'd have gone separate ways new bonds now bind us both through our love's days We sit, you knit, I frown and chew a pen the crossword finished, turn another page, adjacent chairs from six, in bed by ten, routine crept in unnoticed with our age. Wordless orders given, the curtains drawn, leave mugs in sink, TV to standby mode, abandoned, cat looks up at us, forlorn then out the door it hurtles up the road. For thirty years of love have come to this, two tired bodies snuggle, conserve heat, our silent breathing pauses for one kiss, a gasp as my warm back receives cold feet When two people know everything's alright then let the sun go down on their love's night 1st February 2016 For contest 'Our year in love' by Olive Eloisa Guillermo

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Date: 2/2/2016 11:21:00 PM
Viv:You are a storyteller extraordinaire. Clever, witty and all with rythm & rhyme. So much to enjoy here with the real scenes of domestic bliss we all relate to intertwined. SuZ
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Date: 2/3/2016 12:21:00 AM
Thanks, Suz, very kind. How many youngsters think that future love will be all Mister Darcy, Moonlit strolls, Violins and never a cross word? Boy, are they in for a shock..... Thanks for dropping by. Viv x
Date: 2/2/2016 7:51:00 PM
Funny what time does to our relationships. You capture it all so well. Great story. Like the couplet at the end--sort of sonnet like--yes. She could have gotten to know you much faster if she'd just given you a pint. It works every time.
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Date: 2/2/2016 10:35:00 PM
Good point, Duke, but maybe I was too drunk to notice at the time :) Thanks for dropping by, regards, Viv
Date: 2/2/2016 4:06:00 PM
Excellent pen Viv! Beautifully painted love piece! A 7! And thank you for visiting my page I deeply appreciate it.Good Luck in the contest!:) Wishing you a very lovely week! In his light God bless you always!:) D
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Date: 2/2/2016 10:36:00 PM
Thanks, Dorian, appreciate your lovely comment. blessings, Viv x
Date: 2/2/2016 12:26:00 AM
Enjoyed this delightful and honestly written sonnet, Viv. Love's highs and low and life can test, yet deepen the ties that bind. A 7 and good luck in the contest:)
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Date: 2/2/2016 12:33:00 AM
Thanks Laura, I'll never get a job with Mills & Boon, that's for sure :) . Viv x
Date: 2/2/2016 12:05:00 AM
Beautiful! The couplet at the end touches our heart universally.
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Date: 2/2/2016 12:33:00 AM
Thank you Probir, I appreciaate your visit. Regards, Viv
Date: 2/1/2016 3:18:00 PM
You know it's love when you can both be comfortable with each other. Good luck Viv
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Date: 2/1/2016 11:27:00 PM
Yes, Tim, those torrid,breathless interludes are long past. The only breathless interludes are at the top of the stairs, getting my second wind :) . Thanks for dropping by. regards, Viv
Date: 2/1/2016 11:59:00 AM
- A long story, filled with love Viv - Good luck in the contest, Olive will love this :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/1/2016 11:27:00 PM
Hope she does, Anne Lise, I needed a sleep after typing it :) .Viv x
Date: 2/1/2016 10:13:00 AM
the flow of your lines is enchanting, viv.. you awe me!..huggs
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Date: 2/1/2016 11:20:00 AM
Thanks, nette, my finger joints all ache from doing syllable counts :) . Thanks for dropping by, Viv x

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