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I found him slumped over his Remington No.5, no more "Elite Typing" for this poor fellow. His Fedora was on the floor beside him, flat as a pancake with a stilleto heel print in the centre of it. Other than a pair of McCalls boxers, he wasn't wearing anything. The "Besame Red Velvet Lipstick stain on his crotch, matched the color on the cigarette butts in the black ashtray on his desk. I noticed the ashtray was embosed with a logo from the stork club. I had been to the Stork club a few times, it's over on 53rd street. Not the kinda place for an ordinary gumshoe like myself. This guy musta been a regular, there were match books all over the apartment. In a place like that you never know who you might bump into. I seen Frank there one time, he didn't give me a second look. I tried to get into the Snub room once but couldn't get past St. Peter, maybe he didn't like that I was wearing a single gold earing. I did some calling around, it seems the poor chump was Vincent Scott, a rich banker from Hollywood. He had been about town with a Dorthy Lamour Wanabee. She had the attitude but was a bit lacking in the looks department. Mind you for a balding middle aged banker, she was probably the Cat's Ass. Rumor was that he was planning on leaving his wife and two kiddies. Judging by the two, one way tickets to Cuba in his desk drawer, plans were well under way. I guess that bullet hole in the center of Vincent's forehead kinda spoiled his plans.

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Date: 7/23/2015 10:23:00 PM
The wording in this story takes me to another place in time. I love it when a poem can do that!... A very enjoyable and creative write! Congrats on a great win, Rick!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/24/2015 9:58:00 AM
Thanks Kelly, I'm pleased you enjoyed it.
Date: 7/14/2015 2:16:00 AM
Hi Richard, Congrats on Carol's story, poem CONTEST. Always ~~ LINDA ~~
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/14/2015 8:50:00 AM
Thanks Linda.
Date: 7/14/2015 12:30:00 AM
RICHARD,, Congratulations on your awesome story win. Love SKAT
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/14/2015 8:50:00 AM
Thanks SKAT.
Date: 7/13/2015 2:48:00 PM
dropping back with my congrats Richard great to re read this again:-) hugs Jan xx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/14/2015 8:51:00 AM
Thanks Jan.
Date: 12/29/2014 9:00:00 AM
I love it too. I hope you fared well in the contest? Thanks for stopping by my work. Light & Love & Happy New Year
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/29/2014 10:07:00 AM
I just checked, I guess it didn't make the cut.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/29/2014 9:23:00 AM
Thanks Debbie. ;0)
Date: 12/14/2014 12:04:00 AM
Your descriptive words here were awesome, Rick. I didn't know there was a detective hiding in you somewhere. Hmmmmm. You sure fit the part, Mr Lamoureux. :) Good luck, my dear.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/14/2014 7:11:00 PM
Ha ha, thanks. Probably those movies I watched as a kid.
Date: 12/13/2014 7:31:00 PM
Wow, so different, Richard! A completely different side of you that I haven't read. Would make a great opening to a murder mystery. The anticipation and build up was well thought out - I didn't even connect the dots that you were talking about a dead person until the very last sentence, actually. Well done!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/14/2014 7:15:00 PM
Thanks Tim, just trying to mix things up a bit. I'm glad you like it.
Date: 12/13/2014 1:52:00 AM
Come on hurry up write the next chapter please, I await with anticipation....Seren
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/13/2014 10:08:00 AM
Thanks Seren, I'll have to see if my muse has more to say.
Date: 12/12/2014 10:51:00 PM
Fantastic story Richard. You should do well with this but I still wish you good luck.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/13/2014 10:06:00 AM
I am always happy to accept luck, thanks Brenda.
Date: 12/12/2014 8:49:00 PM
You have outdone yourself here, this confirms my previous comments, you sir are an an expert story teller! Loved this!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/13/2014 10:05:00 AM
You are kind Arthur, I wish I could favorite a comment.
Date: 12/12/2014 5:31:00 PM
great story Rick gl in contest hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/13/2014 10:02:00 AM
Thanks Shadow.
Date: 12/12/2014 12:58:00 PM
This is so sweet and so detailed:..other than a pair of McCalls Boxers.., I also like the way you used "gumshoe" here ,above all, your detective prowess is great... this is nice Richard...huggs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/12/2014 1:25:00 PM
Thanks Kayode. A hug back to you my friend.
Date: 12/12/2014 10:01:00 AM
Did you write those dime store detective novels and never tell us? This is great. Love the Dorothy Lamour reference.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/12/2014 10:06:00 AM
Who knows maybe she is a distant relative of mine.
Date: 12/12/2014 8:07:00 AM
This is a different theme and I love the way you did it.Leaving a mystery to be solved ,and the reader in suspense.WoW!Charma
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/12/2014 9:01:00 AM
Thanks Charmaine, I had fun with this one.
Date: 12/11/2014 11:07:00 AM
Kept me hooked, Richard...maybe we can have a follow up to this one! Keen to know how it's going to continue...and end! // paul
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/11/2014 5:09:00 PM
It's a mystery to me as well.
Date: 12/11/2014 9:27:00 AM
Are you going to solve the murder? Would hate for the bad guy/girl to get away Waiting for the sequel See you soon Love Mom
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/11/2014 5:15:00 PM
One more day mom! Love ya.
Date: 12/11/2014 6:24:00 AM
A great read. Enjoyed it muchly, just enough to get us in, and leave us hanging. Well done, nice style. Will we see more? Best of luck in the comp.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/11/2014 7:43:00 AM
Thanks Scott. I will have to give thought to wether there will be a sequel. Based on the lack of response the likelihood is no but you never know what mood might strike me.
Date: 12/10/2014 8:41:00 PM
That old letter opener in the neck does not make for a good day!! Loved the Cat's Ass comment!! best of luck my friend.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/11/2014 7:44:00 AM
Thanks muchly David.
Date: 12/10/2014 4:49:00 PM
very moody and atmospheric Richard with great imagery - good luck:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2014 5:01:00 PM
Thanks Jan, I did a bit of research for this one. It was fun to write.

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