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In A Hotel Room

 She lay with gloom upon the bed
as outside blinked a garish red
which found its way into her room.
Upon the bed she lay with gloom.

She lay with grief; she lay with rue,
with shabby walls a gray milieu
and circumstance the unmoved thief.
She lay with rue; she lay with grief.

As neon flashed, she lay and thought
of coming west, how hard she'd fought,
and how her dreams had all been dashed.
She lay and thought as neon flashed.

She lay with shame; a thrust of fate
had left her with a wretched weight
and stole her hungering for fame.
A thrust of fate. . . she lay with shame.

Behind closed doors she'll take each john.
She lay with one, and so hereon
she's joined the order of the whores.
She'll take each john behind closed doors.

For the Contest of Black Eyed Susan

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  1. Date: 2/25/2013 5:25:00 PM
    You did an awesome write I was wondering where it was going. Congrats on your win. love phyl

  1. Date: 2/21/2013 11:02:00 AM
    My big congratulations my dear friend for being the top and first place winner! Cheers! love/ hugs, Leonora

  1. Date: 2/21/2013 2:15:00 AM
    refreshingly unpleasant, I mean that. bold and not afraid to make a statement about the un- pleasantries of society, try reading the poem "Jack" by me Karl Marszalowicz thanks.

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 3:49:00 PM
    Congratulations on your well deserving win...

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 10:05:00 AM
    congrats on your 1st place win andrea, a darker and sadder piece from you, perhaps I'm odd but I do like dark, gritty poems! perfect rhyme and perfect execution of the form :)

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 8:49:00 AM
    Congrats on your big win Andrea, this poem is flowing with no obstacle at all, such a beautiful piece of yours Andrea :D enjoyed my reading today - hug, yanny

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 6:54:00 AM
    A beautiful poem this is! Congratulations for your well deserved win! :)

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 3:25:00 AM
    Andrea...... LOVE IT Congrats! :+)

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 1:48:00 AM
    Belated congratulations oh talented one xx

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 1:27:00 AM
    Good job! - Your hotel is 7 star! - Congratulations! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 5:19:00 PM
    Congrats on your big win Andrea, Excellent quatrain, xxx

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 4:56:00 PM
    Congratulations on an awesome win with this awesome poem, Andrea. Love, Annalise

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 4:52:00 PM
    Congrats on your top win....

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 4:51:00 PM
    What a poem, Andrea. So well done. Congratulations on your win. Love and hugs, catie :)

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 4:44:00 PM
    A great win, Andrea. I really enjoyed the sound of the reverse rhyming. Congratulations on your lone no. 1 spot. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 4:12:00 PM
    Hello Andrea, CONGRATULATIONS :-) ~ love your awesome winning poem in Susan's contest.. take care.. PD

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 2:50:00 PM
    One of your best in my opinion, Andrea. Well deserved win. Cheers, Roy

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 2:11:00 PM
    well done Andrea... Seren

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 12:31:00 PM
    congrats on your win Andrea

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 9:49:00 AM
    Below, Becca said amazing, Heather said you nailed it---yo babe, the superlatives are deserved, as Randy Jackson would say--this is over the top well done and Susan knew it was too!!!