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Impress Me Iii,Setting Sail Philosophically

As the day transforms to night, My future expands, and I see light. With determination, and refusal of fail, I feel the wind, and now I've set sail. The air so fresh and easy to breathe, No stress or anxiety, I feel so freed. Using every single mistake I have made, As a stepping stone, on the path I have laid. I now see my trail as I carry on, Head held high, I'm proud, I'm strong. Jayme Philosophically speaking Feb 05,14

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Date: 2/10/2014 10:58:00 PM
Here, it looks as if you made a 180 degree turn from your previous poem. This is easy to read and understand with some good rhyming thrown in for quality enhancement.
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Jamie Grattan
Date: 3/23/2014 2:04:00 AM
Hello, thank you kindly for your kind comment, which poem are you referring to, when you say previous? The 180 degree/ easy to read/understand, gives me the impression the other one was not.... now I'm curious. I appreciate constructive criticism thanks again, J-me
Date: 2/9/2014 7:28:00 AM
Wonderful piece of a poem, congrats on the win, jammie
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Jamie Grattan
Date: 2/10/2014 3:52:00 AM
Thank you! Luv J
Date: 2/7/2014 7:38:00 PM
Winner List: Impress me III! (Old / New) Sponsored by: Giorgio V. are posted and I will: Congratulate you with your winning poem,Jamie !!! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Jamie Grattan
Date: 2/10/2014 3:56:00 AM
Mwah, Anne-Lise, Thank you for taking the time to congratulate me.....xoxox J

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