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I was born at dawn near a wild stream cascading over rocks, the first sounds I heard were birds chattering in the trees. So loud. It was quite a shock falling to the ground like that, gosh I was stunned then I felt something nudging me, and nudging me, so on wobbly legs I stood up and I looked up and up, wow she is tall! I've been following her around for days now, but still not sure of anything, except she is my mother, and she loves me. What exactly am I? I try to do everything she does but I fall down a lot. I have these things that look like wings, maybe I can fly? Nope can't fly! I have become quite clingy and not just to mother but all the others too! Whenever I wander off to explore they bring me back to them quickly with a snort and flick of their long nose. Hey, I have one of those! Oh, if I were like them, big and strong. I dream at night, what if I were an elephant- ______________________________________ December 6, 2016 Poetry/Personification/If I Were An Elephant Copyright Protected, ID 16-8555-586-0 All Rights Reserved. Written under Pseudonym.

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Date: 12/25/2016 9:25:00 PM
It would be a good dream only if you could live beyond reach by man. Beautifully written.
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Date: 12/16/2016 9:58:00 AM
So wonderful, BW, on the baby's perspective. A winner in my eyes
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Date: 12/14/2016 3:25:00 PM
I agree with Darren. so sweet and PURE delight. The wings part was so cute, Constance. Many great elephant poems got ignored. I really hate these premiere contests!
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Date: 12/11/2016 11:42:00 PM
What a delightful picture. I LOVE this, especially the 'wings, nope can't fly' part melted my heart :) Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 12/9/2016 12:14:00 AM
Very well done, love your take on the contest:) a 7:)
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Date: 12/6/2016 11:15:00 PM
What a unique question approach to the life expectancy of an elephant from a baby elephant's perspective! Loved this :)
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Date: 12/6/2016 10:49:00 PM
Hey BW, I like this, a gentle vision of the life of a baby elephant. A quite unique take on the theme
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Date: 12/6/2016 2:42:00 AM
Delightful piece of Personification, BW. Good luck in the Contest. // Barry.
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Date: 12/6/2016 2:22:00 AM
<3 Baby Elephants <3 A darling view from the young one, Broken Wings. : )
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