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I wish I was a mountain majestic, broad and high with a frigid, distant beauty that reaches to the sky to be that grand sierra that you could never change oh, I'd give all things … to be a mountain range. I wish I was a country to which you’ve never been that you have longed to visit but your eyes have never seen should I be such a country as secluded as the sun oh, I'd trade my breaths … to be that land, far-flung. I wish I was a candle that you could never harm a-dancing in the darkness so clear and bright and warm oh, if I could be that flame I would burn away your ire yes, I'd give up every- thing to be that fire. oh, I wish I was a stone so you’d kick me down the beach then throw me to the depths make my heart far out of reach yes, I wish I was a stone rigid, silent, cold, and hard I would trade my life … to be that rocky shard. oh, I wish I was a bayonet with edge of sharpened steel so I could cut your heart out and you'd know how it feels how I wish I was a dagger then I’d sever all our ties yes - I'd sell my soul … to be a blade as wise - for my will is LOST … when I look in your eyes. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Any Poem Written On Your Birthday II" Poetry Contest, Lu Loo, Judge & Sponsor.

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Date: 8/27/2020 9:58:00 PM
This reads like a song lyric, to me anyway. Real emotional oscillations with a very dramatic ending, scary almost, then scaling back to a classic Greg line "my will is lost when I look in your eyes". Good, powerful love poetry.
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Date: 8/2/2017 2:59:00 PM
Congratz on your well deserved win, Greg. Beautiful words..love it. :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/2/2017 10:24:00 PM
Thank you so much, Shirley, that's very sweet of you - so happy you liked this! :-)
Date: 7/28/2017 1:12:00 PM
How sad Greg. Being heart sick is the worst kind of sickness. I hope your poem was cathartic! Congratulations on your first placement! : )
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/28/2017 1:43:00 PM
Very much so, Connie, and much healing came from the process ... though I'm still powerless over those eyes. Thanks so kindly for your wonderful comments, my friend! :-)
Date: 7/28/2017 9:42:00 AM
A most enjoyable read, congrats on top placement.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/28/2017 1:02:00 PM
Thank you very much, Richard, I greatly appreciate the kind words ... I hope to read and comment on the other winners later today. Blessings!
Date: 7/28/2017 6:54:00 AM
I read this a few times because I kept reading new things everytime. Beautifully expressed. Thank you
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/28/2017 1:01:00 PM
Thank you so very kindly, Laura, I'm so pleased you enjoyed this, and honored to be placed so highly in your contest, in such amazing company! Blessings! :-)
Date: 1/14/2017 11:31:00 AM
Oh my gosh - I am in poem love - this one rocked, Greg - for me it went bam, bam, wham, bam and wham again. I loved the bounce in the words of great rhyme, pain and other emotion that I prayed would led to a, 'but, I can't because ...' and it did - that is where you went and that is the sincerity behind the wonderfully expressed emotion in the other stanzas. YES ... CayCay a 7 for me (your others were skilled, but this turned on my poetry adrenaline!)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/15/2017 5:51:00 PM
Thank you again so much, CayCay - your words are so appreciated, and the three you commented on are all very special to me, and ones I'm very proud of ... this one for similar reasons, the turn-around of emotions that love often puts us through - the things we WISH we could control, but the helplessness of how love hooks us, whether we want it to or not, or whether or not we know WHY. :-)
Date: 12/11/2016 3:09:00 PM
Really good Greg...enjoyed very much
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/12/2016 10:42:00 PM
Thanks so much, Tim, much appreciated!
Date: 12/6/2016 7:13:00 AM
Greg you are a master with a metaphor and my newest poet to follow. Peace out, brother.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/6/2016 8:23:00 AM
Thank you so much, Phil - very much appreciated, my friend!

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